Personal Freestyle

[bronzerebel]

This one doesn't have a lot of metaphors and shit. This was more just flowing off of how I was feeling at the time - rebel

Scribbled down verses falling from the sky like there's a high rate of suicide

Stone face, no expression like when a mime cries

Holy coffin like when a reverend dies, scars all over his face

The world is mine cuz I'm so Al Pacino in this race

I'm tying myself down to the moon just in case cuz I'm outta this world that I'm like the king of space

Mask-less like a mask-less masquerade

Too much exposure so I think I'm gunna fade...away, or maybe I'm gunna cave

Green with envy a motherf*ckers hearts so jade

Cracked glass under my feet today

Man I just gotta get away

Away from all these expectations to be greater

Following my own path, momma telling me that I'm not gunna a failure

But what happens if I fail her?

Like a movie full of hype without a trailer

Bombing in its first weeks release not gettin' another favour

The definition of a rebel not living up too society, walkin' in line but I'm doing it defiantly

Saying it's for myself but in reality it's really the root of my anxiety

A path with no sobriety, I wanna pour out my emotion but instead I'll just keep it all inside of me

Bow down to the almighty, listening too Able scream

Like "Is this another kid just pouring his future down the drain along with his make believe and peroxide dreams?"

Maybe he's just a profit who hasn't found his path fighting another battle too get up stream

[bronzerebel]

Written too the speed of this track and beat https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=nFE7rSaVM1Q

[IShred4Life]

Being a fan of longer verses rather than basic short ones, I really like this write, ecspecially the main content. Darker in my eyes, which I like.

[bronzerebel]

Thanks for the feedback man

[ABeautifulVirus]

sounds like a morbid Mos - love it!!

[thesong]

Pretty cool, man. The main thing that jumped at out me for changing is the bit about the mime in the second line. Because mimes are actually all about expression. They just don't make any sound. 

[bronzerebel]

Haha good point. Thanks for the feedback man

[Boston]

"Following my own path, momma telling me that I'm not gunna a failure

But what happens if I fail her?"

To address the whole thing at once I'd say its above average, but that line I quoted shit man thats dope as f*ck.

The only problem I saw was a bit of perfect ryms sort of offsets me never like it when somebody does that but other then that man good job I liked the unique patterns good style keep it up.

[bronzerebel]

Thanks I really appreciate all the feedback homie