Meh..

[Emilkuhnel]

Broken pen´ Oh where will you lead?

  To a place; I'll be freed? 

 

Through mans empty promises; and book held in hand

  With a broken pen´I stand!

 

Countless walls built; along the way

  Like a maze; they say

 

I hope you'll lead me out~of this haze

  Oh´ broken pen; I commence 

 

Ropes tied around my neck; Oh´ what will I do?

   I hope it´s not true!

 

Broken pen´Oh where will you lead?

  To a place; I'll be freed?

 

 

[MPerry]

Hi E

 

I like this, but you left me wanting something else, it did not feel totally developed, it felt more like random fragments not a cohesive total thought? maybe it's me, but I think this could be so much more!....just my humble opinion...regards Mike