thank you

[kriss]

thank you

thank you for caring,

for talking to me

thank you for listening

and comforting me

thank you for everything

for helping me want to live

thank you for showing me

there's more to life than being negative

thank you for getting me drunk

and having a laugh

thank you for letting me dance with your mum

to that funky ska

[Rudi]

That last verse makes it real. More personal.

[Steve]

Yeh! Good stuff here Kriss. I agree with Rude, the last verse is the clincher!

What was she like?

[kriss]

she was great! she was smokin and so was i and she took my splif not reolisin the contents and was so stoned!!!!

but she is way oloder than me!

peace

kriss

[smem]

she was great! she was smokin and so was i and she took my splif not reolisin the contents and was so stoned!!!!

but she is way oloder than me!

peace

kriss

kriss u goon! yay i havnt been on here for ages then i got an email from them n i remembered

good poem btw lol

[Steve]

Smem! Where you been? We missed you..

[Nightwolf]

Suggestion:

These sound like variations of a chorus, how bout making these choruses and writing verses to go in between.

I think it has real potential!

Verses could be along the lines of "life sucks, but then I look up and see you" "Thank you"

Seems a bit short as it is, but it's your world.

Sorry, I thought it was posted in Lyricstuff, as a Poem it stands fine. I'll leave my ideas up just in case, let me know if you want it removed.

Peace,

John Nightwolf