How I writing?

[GREEN BOY 14]

hi errbody, I just wanna know wat u think bout my writing level,lmaoo. I just wanna know if I'm a good writer, and I do all my beats too. pls tell me wat do u think bout my swagg too haha.

Thanks for the people who listen to my .

 

Thanks 

 

Green Boy

 

 

[MikeRobinson]

I definitely see some very interesting musical and melodic ideas here, but in each case right now I see them being (unnecessarily ...) overlaid with "musical, lyrical, and rhythmic 'tropes.'"

 

For instance:  "That rapid-fire rhythmic tat-tat-tat ... why?"  "The apparently-perfunctory resorting to (frankly, uninspired) 'rap' ... why?"

 

In many of these pieces, I actually heard very-interesting melodic and rhythmic ideas that really sounded promising. 

 

But then, "what have you so-far done with it?"  So far, not much.  Around "measure 16," the same tropes just came pounding back.

 

I would therefore simply encourage you to ... "think outside the box."  As a composer, your boundaries are actually unlimited.  Explore them.  You can do anything with a good musical idea! 

 

And so:  take this collection of interesting and promising musical notions and please explore what else you could do.  (Yes, other composers have been plowing these same grounds for many centuries.  Enjoy!)