No motivation

[averagejoe]

No motivation

Pulling over the car

No gas left to keep me going

This ride has been way too bizarre

It's more or less suprising to me

that I even came this far

Throwing away my pointless existence

Bending and stretching my fragile life line

Losing my sight and track of things

Becoming blind

No motivation

Motivation indeed still lacking

Throwing rocks at the devil

frustration growing steadily

Didn't think that I could sink to his level

No motivation

Trying to control my own one-way conversation

Arguing with myself doesn't help my frustration

Edited April 5, 2006 by averagejoe

[Nightwolf]

This has potential, but I feel (this is only my opinion) it still needs work. the inconsistant rhyming scheme and the different line lengthes make it hard for me to read. It does have a lot of potential.

[Nightwolf]

This has potential, but I feel (this is only my opinion) it still needs work. the inconsistant rhyming scheme and the different line lengthes make it hard for me to read. It does have a lot of potential.

Bending and stretching my fragile life line

Losing my sight and track of things

Becoming blind

Awesome lines there!!

[averagejoe]

Thank you. I'm really glad that you are honest about your opinion, and I agree. However, I'm not sure how to make it any better without screwing it up and making it worse.

[Nightwolf]

This looks better to me, what do you think?

No motivation

Pulling over the car

No gas left to keep me going

This ride has been way too bizarre

It's more or less suprising to me

that I even came this far

Throwing away my pointless existence

Bending and stretching my fragile life line

Losing my sight and track of things

Becoming blind

No motivation

Motivation indeed still lacking

Throwing rocks at the devil

frustration growing steadily

Didn't think that I could sink to his level

No motivation

Trying to control my own one-way conversation

Arguing with myself doesn't help my frustration

[averagejoe]

This looks better to me, what do you think?

I agree.

[Nightwolf]