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Yeah right not your fault lol!

Looks like a one horse race here John! 1-0 to the lyricists

Lol bro. Glad you got a sense of humour dont ever lose your sense of humour or you will be doomed! enjoy your coffe i just had some tea.

Sorry James but I had to I had to I tell you! My name is James, I was born with a willy Yeah my name is James, I was born with a willy I only used it thrice, now it looks well kinda silly I await your retribution, lol

Love this kinda banter great micky taking lyrics on your part Tom. I must say I've been married for 36 yrs this year same woman of course so I cant share your pain otherwise I would lol! Shes been my rock to be a little cliche. all the best guys great stuff

Well heres a different lyric but based on the same structure as Toms idea. Very many doubts but I have given it a shot. Cheers Les I Got It Bad I got it bad, an I'm gonna take a fall Ooh yeah I got it bad, an I'm gonna take a fall I know she'll strip me to the bone, nail my skin to her wall But I got a craving, I gotta craving for her flesh Ooh yeah I got a craving, got a craving for her flesh I know she'll chew me up, toss me right out in the trash I'm gonna leave town, take the midnight train Ooh yeah I'm gonna leave town, take the midnight train I gotta get away from her, before she drives me insane

sorry no full lyric as of yet but getting ideas as i go. I will post asap with my offering.

Big thanks to you both, now I have base to build on I will try and write to that. Thanks boys you are the best. Les

Thanks Tom, heres a link to my idea of how it should sound or similar anyway. Les

Ok Been listening to some blues while driving and I think Ive got the an idea of this but and most likely I am wrong. Here's an A section, am I on the right track? Needs work lyrically but more on the way its written and you hear it thats what Im after. Its D day, we've signed our love away Yeah its D day baby, we've signed our love away You've taken everything I own Now I ain't got no, place too stay Cheers most knowlegable ones you are my mentors. Les

Thanks Tom I have not tried this style before so I didnt understand the structure. I will plod on reading and listening to songs and tey and get something done. Thanks Gary and Tom for your input, most helpful as always. Cheers Les

Out of curiosity guys does this qualify? Still experimenting and reading stuff but your thoughts appreciated. Needs work and the 3rd line 2nd verse does not rhyme as in the 1st verse with the internal rhyme, does it matter? Its D day we signed the papers today Yeah its D day we signed the papers today We signed our love away now theres nothing to say Yeah its D day we signed the papers today I gave that woman my every breath Yeah I gave that woman my every breath She gladly took it all now theres nothing left Yeah I gave that woman my every breath Cheers Les

Cheers Gary you are always helpful much appreciated. Tom I got a melody and this sounds just like I wanted too in my head of course. I guess this is a good structure like Gary was saying to emulate for this challenge or similar. Nice write and I bet it will sound real good. Les

Just my opinion but I thought the " put me on ice" seemed rushed? Like you tried to cram it in? You know I'm no musician but thats what I thought. I think I might be out of my depth with this challenge as I dont really know blues or much else for that matter when it comes down to music styles and how they should be structured I just put pen to paper and hope it comes out right. Cheers for your comment and always appreciated as you know. Good luck Les

Cheers I will look at this some more tonight. Thanks Les

Ok heres mine, had an idea the day before the challenge an adapted it. I hope I'm on the right track. Please feel free to challenge me with this as I'm no musical guru and I hear this old style with the repeats after listening to a cd I bought. D-Day is the meant to mean divorce day. Cheers Les It's D-Day © Lesile Serive 2016 Blues Challenge It's D-day We signed the papers today Yeah yeah yeah yeah It's D-day We signed the papers today There's nothing more for us to say We signed our love away Yeah Yeah Yeah Yeah It's D-day We signed the papers today I gave that women _ that woman My every breath Yeah yeah yeah yeah yeah I gave that women _ that woman My every breath She gladly took it all Now I'm standing like a fool Yeah I gave that woman My every breath It's D-day We signed the papers today Yeah yeah yeah yeah It's D-day We signed the papers today There's nothing more for us to say We signed our love away Yeah Yeah Yeah Yeah It's D-day We signed the papers today

Mate I was just gonna contact you to see if you would do some music to a lyric for this challenge! But i wont now of course as you have posted. i like this and got a melody straight away, glad too see you joining in on the challenge. Good luck Les

Well done Amy.

Sorry mate not got much for this challenge so far.

John When you say "work" you are talking about the lyric? only got a couple of lines right now. Les

The bridge has been the bain of my life for ths one, I have toyed with many ideas and none seem too truely fit! I did have a longer version of the bridge and quite like the " riding to RnR" line but would may be use "with" instead of to. Thank you for taking the time to comment and sorry I could not give you a more indepth critique. Cheers Les

John! Good Goobers? Where the bugger does that saying come from? I like it though lol. I am pretty much with the mic thing as well, and this lady can write real well. Les

John Theres not much I can offer on your lyric other than a few tweaks. I did think the 3rd verse did not have the same flow to the melody i had for the other verses? This line makes me want to add words lol. Each demonic voice sings to Of each demonic voice that sings? Otherwise a good solid write that has a stong message and ticks all the boxes for the challenge. Les

Heres a complete version, still unsure of it as a whole and have been twiddling with the bridge for ages then this came out. Hope you enjoy the read Grunty rock genre! In The Name Of Rock n Roll ...copyright LGS2017 V Forgive me father I have sinned Now the Devil owns my soul They tell me I will go to Hell In the name of Rock n Roll V Blackened heart twisted mind I've strayed outside the fold He knows not what he does (they cry) In the name of Rock n Roll I had an idea to swap these lines? added to the end of the originals. B I don't need the false salvation Of men with lack of vision Bring on the four horsemen...If this is the Devils music If this is the Devils music........Bring on the four horsemen replace "Then" with "And" Then I will ride with them V Too late now for redemption The bell of my master tolls I've chosen my own damnation In the name of Rock n Roll

Hi John Using God too me is fine im using Devil! May slip a God in there somewhere lol. At.work.on my.phone so.will have a.proper read.later but like what you have Les