[Lampworking (Finished First Verse)]

 This is the finished first verse to a song I am writing called "Lampworking".

 

Lampworking

Forge an attar by triune homa,
Of pallor ash haranae.
Orange pallia glow sub-rosa,
Amour of a charolais.

Luciformis aureate porcelain,
Corpus de atelier,
Watch a scarlet oculus radiate,
Bellow a coronet.

Hallowed iron to marver rubino
Gathers of Adelaide.
Court a newly visage cerulean,
Sewing stones with a glaze.

Bore an ornament by the magus' helve,
Cast a form by the flame.
Colubrinus elan-vital, echad

Ousiarch palanquin.

 

Mitamashiro seda palantir

Sacristan dalasi.

[Do You Write For An Audience Or For Yourself?]

Patton Oswalt had a great bit about no longer having music the he hates,  and another about the concept of a sellout; as well as saying something to the extent of, "I always wrote for now, where a lot of people write for the ages" , both of the ideas introduced just clicked for me. Targeting a specific demographic and succeeding in doing so seems to be an artform all on its own. This question stems from me reading my own material and thinking to myself, "nobody in their right mind would understand or even give a shit about this".

[Do You Write For An Audience Or For Yourself?]

Of late, the question of target audience and accessibility has been reoccurring throughout the day. Do you write with a specific audience in mind, or is that nothing more than an after thought? How does clarity of meaning, and accessibility affect your writing itself as well as the process?

[Omen Rama - "smythe Of Fires"]

My apologies, the music was not even on soundcloud. The piece is up now though:)

[Omen Rama - "smythe Of Fires"]

Here is my soundcloud page if ur still interested:)

 

https://soundcloud.com/omenrama/smythe-of-fyres

 

https://soundcloud.com/omenrama

[Omen Rama - "smythe Of Fires"]

This piece is near its completion just looking for feedback , thank you and I hope you enjoy:)

 

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rIAv_px6GQI

 

 

[Short Rap Verse]

Would using italics where there is a stress be appropriate?

[Critiquing Rap Lyrics]

Yeah. But I'm still thinking of questions and answers as to why one would want to do this; I'm just running with an idea I never before considered.

[Critiquing Rap Lyrics]

I think what I am trying to say is that; acquiring the knowledge of poetic structure will help us to understand why something sounds good to us - and that will in turn; enable us to communicate what we understand to others. The difference between rap and the lyrics of other genres of pop music is that it has the potential to stand on its own as a literary form (this is just an idea and in no way supposed to be law). I can only think of three artists, within this genre, that can transcend the music and have their lyrics be able to stand on legs of their own; and even then I am aware that it's all far from flawless. Rap is a young art form and will eventually take its rightful place within the liberal arts; but it has to separate itself from the music to do this. No longer restrained to the structure of song, we would be able to incorporate poetic structure without feeling hindered.

[Critiquing Rap Lyrics]

There is a book that was published in 2010 by Adam Bradley and Andrew Dubois titled; The Anthology of Rap. As your reading this book you begin to notice that, unless your familiar with the song, an accurate portrayal of the artists intended meter and rhythm become difficult; The reason for this is that, most of the artists never intended for these lyrics to be anything but heard. Does the average person care to pull a rap off their bookshelf to sit and recite a verse from, Tupac Shakur's Brenda's Got A Baby, for pleasure? Outside of those who actively listen to rap music, I would say nobody. Why would someone do that when they can just listen to the song?

[Listening To Music With Craig Wright]

Any members here check out this series of video. Craig Wright at Yale,  lecturing on how to listen to classical music.

 

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5_yOVARO2Oc&list=PLh9mgdi4rNezhx8YiGIV8I22ICSuzslja

 

 

[Learning To Rap]

Hey,

 

Thanks for the reply. Hmm, i sort of get where your coming from with reference to poetry but how will it help get better at rapping? Justt by reading poems over and over

When you learn, understand and memorize a poem; your embedding that data into your psyche, whether that data be an idea, structure, or rhythm. When I began to rap it seemed to come slightly natural because I had already committed to memory a large number of compositions. Reading poetry, or anything for that matter, is about the incorporation of information.

[Need Help Regarding Lyrics]

Think about the two people – the guy, the girl – that you are writing about.  Try to visualize them; to visualize the scene.  (Make sure that neither one of them looks like you ...)  What does he say ... what does she say?

 

Sounds like a screenwriter:)

[Song Writing]

"For one thing, I give myself permission to write bad songs."

 

I have a hard time doing this. It's some weird thing I am just now getting over; where I would hate to "waste" a word or an idea on practice.

[Critiquing Rap Lyrics]

Should structure in rap be through poetic meter and form; or by musical rhythm?What do you value more? The music or the written composition.

[Short Rap Verse]

The Ins/outs of rap lyrics and their rules have never been established.  "This drinks got me slippin " confuses the reader.

[Short Rap Verse]

Would splitting some of the lines in half make the rhythm more natural for the reader? Beginning with the first line.

 

For example:       This girl ain't average, no this bitch is different                     This girl ain't average,

                                                                                                                          No this bitch is different.

 

 

 

Any experienced song writers here that can tell me if that makes any difference at all in the readers rhythm?

[Rap Freestyle]

The poisonous relationship. I was stumbling around with the rhythm a bit as well.