Dersonton

I wrote it badly. What i meant is i don't want to continue writing this song, I'll appreciate any opinion you'll write on it, and i'll respond to anythig i get. Sorry for the misleading.

Yes, I study it on high school. Here's a second part that i wrote recently. Not gonna write about this anymore. That evening i was full of rage Just wanted to get from that cage Wanted to flip to another page But then i felt something in my chest Nah, i believe it’s just too much stress My head became a total mess Everywhere i saw your face I had just you on my mind Everything all got blew by wind Everytime you’re nice and kind Time with you is cool and fine No wonder i fell for you I coudln’t believe that’s the true When you said you like me too But you didn’t count two and two It seems that you still have no clue Even though you’re in our crew And all of that we’ve been through I don’t get your point of view i am supposed to be one who you’ll just ask: what is new ?

Hi guys, I'm quite new here i just wanted to ask you how do you like my song. It's about the girl i like and how she choosed to be again with her ex. it's not complete, chorus/hook is missing, i just wanna know if i am going the right way PS: it should be a rap song. You’re again with that meathead ? Just because he couldn’t sleep at his bed ? Nah, I just feel a lil‘ bit bad i wish it’ll be great But don’t you remmeber bitch, how was it rare To get out of him any sings of care Okay, let me be fair He did it once where He couldn’t just bear after you left side of his chair and there was nothin but air. You succesfuly drove me insane Now i’m in very big pain I wasn’t thinking with brain Can you please now explain What were the thoughts in your head and What you ment when you said I like you I guess i just have to stand in a queue Of every guy that you screw While you don’t even knew What you were going to do With that situation in your life If you are going to cut it out with a knife or if you are staying to become his wife So I joined in, try to help with everything i could, Tried to make you happy and everything good I just wanted to see you back in the mood But then it started to get really confusing I seemed to be one you are choosing To spent the time with and I found it amusing Till the point i started losing Sleep about bitch who just play with emotions After you f*ck throw ‘em into oceans. You don’t care ‘bout explosions What happens with every heart That’ll shatter into parts That wasn’t very smart Getting back together with that jerk How do you think it was gonna work When you alredy cheated on him Whether is john or it’s tim he still just think about gym so let this song become hymn of every guy that lost way and so his day won’t be gray even if there’s time you have to pay or you’ll want to cry in a rain everybody will say that love is just a beautiful pain but i still think up to this day that love is insane. I'd love to hear any critic from you.