Haven't posted on this forum in a minute, these are just some bars that I recently wrote. Would really appreciate some critique.
Enough of the small talk, homie I need to grow/
Young Pablo stunted by the shows/ of fake personality/
Fake f*cks with fake motives surrounding me/
I just want notoriety without everybody hounding me/ for solutions that I don't have and can't afford/
40 a week for 13, my time is simply worth more/
I'm just trying to soar/ to have whiskey to pour/ and life with rapport/
So my girl can lay close and concur/ that my problems aren't more important than her/
So my father can finally say you're welcome/ because my life had a good outcome/ without retribution because I don't want none/
I don't want constant stress and pain in my liver/ with nothing to live for and branches splintered/
Surrounded by fallen leaves that I cover up in the winter/
To not even consider/ that maybe I'm just a sinner/ young in age that's got a life ahead of high f*cks and low blows/
Mary Janes and Jon Doe's/
But until god decides to show I'm outta time for my shadow/
So enough of the small talk, homie I need to grow/