A House Of Cards

[RyanW073]

My life is a house of cards

And you're the one in control of it

You could make it all fall apart

Or you could choose to be a part of it

 

This is one of the first ideas i came up with .. keep in mind that english isn't my native language, please help me improve the way i write! thanks =D

[Kenj]

What comes to mind here is that a house of cards is subject only to the whims of fate.  No one really controls the fall of a house of cards.  It contains it's own demise within itself.   The Other, the "you" might certainly swat it. So the task of the narrator is to decide whether to defend or allow destruction, maybe?  Just a thought.  No problems with language that I can see.  I wonder what language is your native one.