Critiquing Rap Lyrics

[justsoulin]

Your argument rebel doesn't work for your example: Chance the Rapper

 

I get the rhythm and I'm an illiterate rapper

[bronzerebel]

Can you honestly tell me that you matched the exact rhythm of the actual song

[omenrama]

I think what I am trying to say is that; acquiring the knowledge of poetic structure will help us to understand why something sounds good to us - and that will in turn; enable us to communicate what we understand to others. The difference between rap and the lyrics of other genres of pop music is that it has the potential to stand on its own as a literary form (this is just an idea and in no way supposed to be law). I can only think of three artists, within this genre, that can transcend the music and have their lyrics be able to stand on legs of their own; and even then I am aware that it's all far from flawless. Rap is a young art form and will eventually take its rightful place within the liberal arts; but it has to separate itself from the music to do this. No longer restrained to the structure of song, we would be able to incorporate poetic structure without feeling hindered.

Edited March 20, 2014 by omenrama

[justsoulin]

 

Can you honestly tell me that you matched the exact rhythm of the actual song

 

Again you missed the point rebel, we're talking about critiquing, and how we need to find "a" rhythm to help us through "reading" it, regardless that I've heard the actual song or not That's what John was saying in part. Regardless that it's rap or squiffy music

 

 

but it has to separate itself from the music to do this. No longer restrained to the structure of song, we would be able to incorporate poetic structure without feeling hindered

 

So you want to right poetry in the vein of rap? That's what that sounds like (not saying that's good or bad)

[omenrama]

Yeah. But I'm still thinking of questions and answers as to why one would want to do this; I'm just running with an idea I never before considered.

[irwin]

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PnRXQkoeuo8

 

I Hate Myself
©2014 Irwin Abrigo
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I look in the mirror and what did I see
I didn't like what was looking back at me
It was myself
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I hate my head and I don't like my feet
I don't like my hands my mouth and my teeth
Don't like nose my hair and my ears also
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(Chorus) 
I got a story to tell
I really hate myself
I got a story to tell
I've got a story to tell
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I don't like going out and I don't like staying home
Don't like being in a crowd and I don't like being alone
Don't like to talk and I don't like to sing
Hate being a loser and i don't want to win
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(Chorus) 
I got a story to tell
I really hate myself
I got a story to tell
I've got a story to tell
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(Bridge)
I don't like going out to the late talk shows
I don't like watching TV and I don't like Videos
You may think that I'm crazy with the things I say and do
Like I hate being me and I don't want to be you
Don't like what I rejected don't like what I choose
Don't want to be rich and I don't want to be poor
But in life I'm trying to be the best I can 
I hope one day to be the world's number one man
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(Rap)
You may say it in your minds about a million times
That I am an alien and I don't belong on this land
But I was born and rise right here on earth
I've walked and worked on this dirt
So just like you I have the life I'm living
i hate to shay alive but I don't want to die
Don't ever ask me why
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(Chorus) 
I got a story to tell
I really hate myself
I got a story to tell
I've got a story to tell
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(Change 2)
Think that I'm strong you said I am wrong
You said I am weak because I've written this song 
Never had no one to tell me that they'd loved me
Everyone I knew told me that they hated me
Need someone to show me love give me confidence
So I can love myself
Cause to the world this story 
Is what I'd always wanted to tell 
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You got to love yourself
Don't hate yourself
Cause the greatest love of all 
Is to love yourself
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I look in the mirror and what did I see
I like what was looking back at me
I love myself
I really love myself

Edited March 21, 2014 by irwin