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[x_*kate*_x]

cutting my wrist

makes the pain go away

leaves me with a look of

satasfaction on my face

i know its wrong

i want it to go away

but it wont

it wants to stay

endless nights and shorter days

makes life harder

dont want to stay

i cant live like this

cant make it through another day

im gonna say good bye

and im not gonna cry

im gonna go with a smile on my face

and know that im going

to a better place

[Rudi]

Hi Kate. Over all its pretty chilling stuff. The 'it' grows into a creepy form. Id like to have heard to heard the 'it' developed further.

[shoofta]

cutting my wrist

makes the pain go away

leaves me with a look of

satasfaction on my face

i know its wrong

i want it to go away

but it wont

it wants to stay

endless nights and shorter days

makes life harder

dont want to stay

i cant live like this

cant make it through another day

im gonna say good bye

and im not gonna cry

im gonna go with a smile on my face

and know that im going

to a better place

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I totally agree with Rudi, very chilling. These words paint a picture in my mind that is one of dispare, and of acceptance. What struck me most was that it was written in a way that doesn't convey self pity. Very good work in my opinion.