Poem i wrote when i was sad

[TheLocals]

The dawns resolution

It awakens me to delight

How can the dark be so evident?

So strong and full of fright

 

Ripping and twisting

I bust out of my cell

I envy the free sky

Instead of my somewhat bleak hell

 

This desolate wasteland

Filled with stale memory

This pathetic graveyard

Of unforgiving treachery

 

The sun welcomes me

With arms open wide

And shines on all the land

Strips it bare, nothing to hide

 

My inhibitions melt

The warm glides down my back

And i leave my lonely disposition

Leaving it in its old shack

 

My eyes look forward

Toward the future, it is coming

With its auspicious meadows

That look oh so promising

 

I can not tell what will happen

If i shall fall down to pray

But the sun urges me

To keep waiting for another day

 

What must i do?

I am aching and breaking

My soul can not take it any longer

My earth is shaking

 

The rain falls

Some days the sun doesn't shine

Lightning and thunder fills the air

It sends trembles down my spine

 

I wait and i wait

I grow impatient towards these endeavors

My mind is running myriads in my head

I think maybe i shall never...ever

 

The days wind down

I grow accustomed to my slumber

To watch the days pass by

To live without comfort

 

I wake up the next morning

And i look at the sky

Its beauty is overwhelming

But in my deathbed i lie

 

[jhanover]

Good start. You lose the rhyme scheme towards the end. A B C B then A B C D then back, a pacing issue really. Not as sad as you might have felt when you wrote it, comes across as slightly optimistic with a sad ending. The one thing that does stand out is the forced rhymes, maybe a different setup B A C B as compared to A B C B.