Please critique this

[jessicalucas38]

She walked right in before you know it 

She’s gone 

Disappeared 

Like she was never there 

No scars on my heart 

She walked right in 

She left a clean cut 

walked right out

[Richard Watashi]

Hey there, here's my criticism:

 

1st) I don't understand to the first part: "She walked right in before you know it" ---- maybe it's supposed to be "She walked right in before, you know it"    ?  

2nd) It seems to be unclear to me as to know to whom she left the clean cut on his/her heart, but i'm guessing it was your heart? Or you are her, talking about yourself in third person ? I am really not sure.

 

Anyway, i don't say it's bad writing - it's got certainly a meaning but i only don't see it very clearly. 

[AFish]

Before you know it. Yeah I get ya. Maybe start the second line with before... otherwise I can see where people can trip up the meaning.

Nice poem... girls.. man oh man. They something else.