Falling, Dieing, Dead

[x_*kate*_x]

Falling, Dieing, Dead

And im falling, falling, falling

And im silenced by the fear

The thought that im dieing

Are the only sounds I hear

And im dieing, dieing, dieing

And I cant say im sorry

I've already made my mistake

I cant speak no words today

For Im falling, falling, falling

And m dead, dead, dead

[Rudi]

I read this to the (unbidden) tune of 'Sailing'. Had to overcome that and re-read twice. It worked, I have lost my early morning cheer totally. It doesnt sound much like dieing from an illness, but dieing as a consequence of something avoidable.

[Hope4Peace]

i like it

i really find the following two lines very powerfull to the feel of the entire poem

"And I cant say im sorry

I've already made my mistake"

i think they work very nice..

all together maybe not one of your best, but nice job still