Stay tough

[averagejoe]

When you get what you want

But not what you really seek

When you're feeling way too ordinary

Not unique

When you're feeling f*cked up like me

And not any less or better

On your way down the drain

Writing your death-letter

When you feel like you've had enough

Keep on living

Stay tough

Edited April 6, 2006 by averagejoe

[Rudi]

Made it at last. Nice to see a new poet here.

This bit about the edge seems a little odd. Though I can understand the intent.

When you're feeling f*cked up like me

And not any less or better

On your way down the edge

Writing your death-letter

How about

When you're feeling f*cked up like me

And not any less or better

On your way down the drain

Writing your death-letter

or

When you're feeling f*cked up like me

And not any less or better

On your way over the edge

Writing your death-letter

[averagejoe]

Great to get some good feedback on this poem, and I am grateful for your suggestion. I'll use one of them. thankx

[Nightwolf]

Good stuff

[averagejoe]

Thankx

[john]

Hey

Yeah a good poem. It makes you think enough to engage, but not enough to become frustrated. Great.

Cheers

John

[averagejoe]

Hey

Yeah a good poem. It makes you think enough to engage, but not enough to become frustrated. Great.

Cheers

John

Thank you , that was the whole idea with the poem. To start low, and end with a high, and go on in life, and take the bad with the good.