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Garden Song Pt3

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Beneath the garden gate

She whispered to me in the moonlight

We spoke of Magick

And weaved each other spells in the night

She wove a cage around my Heart

Made of brambles to protect

I created angel wings

From moss and mystic words

And the cage did not protect me

As my angel flew away

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Steve

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Pretty poetic lines there Wolf! If I might offer one suggestion? I think the last two lines would read better as,

But the cage did not protect me

And my angel flew away

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Thanks folks.

Steve, the way you write it makes it sound to me like she flew due to the cage. The cage was to protect my Heart from harm, but it could not protect it from the one thing that could still break it. Does that make sense?

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