Out At Sea

[Da Prophecy]

This is a sonnet I have been working on for what seems like forever but I finally finished it. I don't want to say what it's about because I hope that can be figured out through reading what follows.

My heart is as a boat without a sail

Drifting down the tumultuous sea of love

With no destination in sight to derail

This nomadic journey I’m a part of.

When one appeared, my heart continued to flow

Steadily and stoically downstream

Past land that it was willing to forego

For lack of appeal to its hopes and dreams.

But the eyes of my heart are proven blind

Because while flowing it has made the mistake

Of missing land perfect in rhythm and rhyme,

Ever-present but always noticed too late.

So out at sea it’ll be until the end

Because desired land won’t appear before then.

[john]

Hey DP

Nice to see you back around

I enjoyed your sonnet. Are you wanting comments, or focused comments of any kind?

Cheers

John

[Da Prophecy]

Comments are fine. Whatever you want to give.

[Guest aspecto]

this is class!