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  1. God Send Me an Angel

    Thank you for checking out my lyric. I hoped to push the topic on the danger of pain pills, giving enough detail, without making lyric too long. I also, hoped to bring out emotion in the listener. Hope this helps, Years later, the daughter was still going through numerous surgeries, and continuously placed on higher doses of pain meds. No matter how hard she tried stopping, she was placed on more pain pills even stronger ones, after each surgery. Hope this explains. Thanks again for looking over my lyrics and your comments.
  2. God Send Me an Angel

    (All comments are welcome) She broke down when she got that call tried to stay strong through it all----- dodging traffic, not satisfied, till she was by her daughters side A fractured arm two broken legs That is what/ The doctor said when they met Ooh-- she'll never forget Beside the bed where her daughter lay She bowed down and began to pray And she prayed (Chorus) God send me an angel One that understands And holds my hand when I fall-- God send me an angel One to lift me up/ And help me get through it all--- God send me an angel. Her knees shook Her legs were weak Her voice trembled As she tried to speak Shaken up from it all She called God send me an angel (V) Years later, more surgeries to go Her life's a mess, out of control Hooked on pills, she's prescribed she wants to quit and she's tried-- Ooh-- Lord knows she's cried (Mom sings) I know you hurt everyday But there has to be a-- better way Ooh is anyone listening at all I can't see tomorrow come deep inside I feel numb I try and walk but wanna run away from it all--- Oh-- she calls I cry myself to sleep at night too old and tired for this fight There's been times I've seen it all No strength to walk, No strength to crawl, so I bow down before I fall and I call, yeah I call (Chorus) God send me an angel One that understands and holds my hand when I fall---- one to lift me up/ and help me get through it all--- God send me an angel God send me an angel (V) Loosing everything and her will addicted to prescription pills she breaks down from it all trys to stand, but still can't walk so she cries as she crawls (Talk) God Please Help Me (Sing) I can't see tomorrow come deep inside I feel numb I wanna walk so I can run away from it all She calls (Chorus) God send me an angel One that understands And holds my hand When I fall---- God send me an angel One to lift me up/ And take me away from it all-- God send me an angel God send me an angel
  3. Just in Case

    I love strong songs, they help us through some tough times.
  4. Stop Drug Overdoses Rap

    Now this is what I'm talking about, there's just not enough songs out there, that tell it, like it is, most songs encourage drug abuse. I would love to Co-write with you. I think topics of this nature the world needs to hear. I write different genres. I posted a Christian rap lyric on this website. Hope to hear from you, I really like this one.
  5. Texas Bound

    Thanks so much Takoda, I made some changes, let me know what you think about the changes. About your question, what happened in his dream, It's more of daydreaming, but I thought night fit better than day in that sentence, so maybe daydreaming at night time, it can happen, I do it all the time lol . He just got tired of living the life he had, and realized Texas has more to offer him.
  6. Texas Bound

    Thanks Mike
  7. Texas Bound

    Think it's ready for music?
  8. I am the Phoenix

    I changed I to you, hoping to involve the audience, and get more emotion, I also chose to change tense, in fear of making her still sound weak. If she still sound weak, did she truly burst into flames and rise again, making that change she claimed. So I was unsure what to do on that, but I see what you're saying. Thanks so much Patty for looking over my lyric. I'm starting a rewrite now. I'll repost this one after rewrite.
  9. Need singer and musian

    I need music and singer for my lyrics. Hoping to do a demo.
  10. I'll Be There FULL DEMO!!

    This is a hit in my eyes, beautiful voice, along with the words. Radio quality, I say.
  11. I am the Phoenix

    (Verse) I felt change, I saw in you/ noticed things, I never knew/ You played games, I played the fool always changing, all the rules/ (Music) I shook, I shivered to the words "we're through"/ All those years, I was there for you/ (Music) So I burrowed MY, self in the ground/ Can't believe, I allowed, to burrow MY, self in the ground/ (Do I need another verse here?) (Change of music) from this day forward, I'll make a vow/ I will not bend, I will not bow/ I'll rise up, like the Phoenix now (Chorus) and like the Phoenix I burst in flame turned to ash I've rose again/ Like the Phoenix I'm not gone Arise from ash I will be strong/ Like the Phoenix I'll fly again my broken wing I know will mend/ Like the Phoenix Like the Phoenix (V) (This part is very hard to omit) I must give some thought on it first) (All hot cinders now turn to ash I cash in love for the hate I have boiling rage, from days gone bad Sorrow plays on love we had) (V) Yeah I know you have to die from burning fires held deep inside rise from ash, regain life but I'll mend, deep inside (Chorus) and like the Phoenix I will fly arise from ash I will get by Like the Phoenix Like the Phoenix I'm the Phoenix I will fly rise from death I'll be fine I'm the Phoenix I'll get by (Bridge) I can still feel, all that pain my head hung low, from all the shame through ashes glow, the fires simmer it drapes my soul, then I surrender (Chorus) And like the Phoenix I burst in flame I turn to ash I've risen again Yeah I'm Phoenix I burst in flame I turn to ash reborn again Like the Phoenix Like the Phoenix ( OK don't be too hard on me, cause I'm pretty proud of this one lol, but please do comment, cause I love strong songs, and I want this one perfect, so one day I can hear it recorded as song.) ( question, I was playing around with the idea in mind, bridge having robotic sound? What you all think? ) comment, I did caps on some words purposely, to emphasize during singing. Wanted to use " rose instead of risen". But that would not work under circumstances. On verse, " can't believe, I allowed", I'm wanting to change it to " can't believe That, I allowed"; what do you think?
  12. Signs of the Times

    (Verse) (Rap) I'm not a man who credits God for everything like building my strength due to all my pain whatevers my fault I'll take the blame My god is amazing he's more than a friend he don't give a gift, to take it back again Some of my peeps just don't understand life is a game, a strategy plan you fail at your goal, you're on a roll, you don't care no mo' God is not the blame for the burdens you bare though We make our way by choices we choose he's not to blame for pain we go through (Rap) I've been detested said I'ze outa line a false arrest no proof to the crime locked behind bars a very long time with murders n' rapist in a world unkind During court the judge turned to me he said give your reason state your plea I'd just praised my Lord N I'z feelin' fine so sticking to my faith I stated my line (Rap) God gives life and the beauty that we share Satan gets the credit for the burdens I bare another 6 six months this time no bail can't cuss and fuss cause it's Satan I'll hail (Chorus) (Female sings) These aren't the best nor the worst of times God has given signal, the devil's alive hold your ground, leave your worries behind these are the trials from the signs of the times (Rap) He's out to push you to your brink till you cut off the Lord and give thanks to him (Verse) (Rap) But I've been there I've played that game It's got me nowhere but a firey flame and when I'm guilty I'll take the blame and when I've done nothing their records claim I'll praise my Lord N I'll feel fine sticking to my faith N stating my line (Chorus) (Rap) God gives life and the beauty that we share N Satan gets the credit for burdens I bare (Female sings) These aren't the best nor worst of times God has given signal, the devil's alive Hold your ground, leave your worries behind these are the trials from the signs of the times (Different Rapper) I've been broken down many times seeking out dollars, only finding dimes (Female sings) These aren't the best nor worst of times (rap) I've lived my life I've played for keeps no holds barred Cause I was weak weak to sin with a strong man's core I let the devil in didn't care anymore (Woman sings) These aren't the best nor worst of times God has given choices , he'll lead the blind (rap) People coming up an telling me give God a chance, it's who you need (1St rapper) I did my part I fought my war from hell and back I shut that door Now I'm shot down for my belief But my Lord is real, he's who I seek (Female sings) Hold your ground, leave your worries behind these are the trials from the signs of the times (Rap) God gives life and the beauty that we share Satan gets the credit for all burdens I bare (Repeat chorus) These aren't the best nor worst of times God has given signal, the devil's alive Hold your ground leave your worries behind These are the trials from the signs of the times
  13. Flaming Fire

    I need to learn to write in bars. Could you help me with writing in bars? I've tried studying up on it, but where I know nothing about music, it makes it difficult for someone, who writes lyrics only, yet it's very important to learn if we as lyric writers truly wish to go farther. Thanks for looking over my lyrics.
  14. Flaming Fire

    I probably shouldn't have written with 3 rd party added , but this was done due to the fact the man nor the woman is still accepting blame, the man doesn't even know their having relationship problems, until she's become so emotional. The chorus just didn't seem to go with anything either spouse would say, so I did like a third party coming in on chorus, unsure about that, what you think?
  15. Flaming Fire

    (Chorus) We can't blame the fire when it burns this high burning all our trash from our own desire/ All of our regrets and all of our dares things we won't forget blame that we both share/ as we sit and wait for the other to try we can't blame the fire when it burns this high/ (V) Oh we both saw it coming and neither one even tried/ Yeah I had to turn away from the tears that you cried/ Now I did not know the rule/ if I leave then I've lied/ now baby it's not true cause I've nothing to hide/ I couldn't sit there with you watching tears roll down your face so I did all that I could do that was turn and walk away/ (2ND chorus) With a fire blazing hot all the blind stand still/ loosing all they've got/ but the bitterness they feel/ who's taking first move who's making first call/ pulling trash from the fire taking blame for the fall/ (V) Oh the fire flames way too high and the trash is burning still/ as you wipe tears from your eyes from the coldness that you feel/ And I'm at a loss for words Don't know what I did wrong/ Cause I never said I'm sorry/ for things to me unknown/ And I know loves a game That everyone learns to play/ It wouldn't matter had I tried I would have lost anyway/ (Chorus) We can't blame the fire when it burns this high burning all our trash from our own desire/ all of our regrets and all of our dares Things we won't forget blame that we share/ As we sit and wait for the other to try We can't blame the fire when it burns this high/ (Bridge) (Female singer) Oh we both saw it coming/ Fire blazing through the weeds/ You drown sorrow in TV Ignoring all my needs/ (Male singer) While you screamed an you shout Didn't say a single word/ how to put this fire out So complaining is all I heard/ (Chorus) No you can't blame the fire when it burns this high As you sit and wait for the other to try/ Burning all the trash as flames get higher/ No you can't put blame on that burning fire/ No you can't put blame on that burning fire.
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