Thus Becomes

Lovely critique, at first i feared it was too long. Thanks 'gents

I like this poem, short but good, and I can connect with it. Nice work

ALONE IN HARMONY THUS BECOMES POETIC CORNER ©2012 written by Kaleb Workman I can feel lost And pay the cost To live life now But we can't ask how To be happy together In society forever With no fear of love No hope from above Outcasts alone We groan and moan Longing for a reason A escape from treason For the ones we love most The ones we hold close Tend to turn their backs Forcing upon the things we lack Pouring out our bleeding heart Screaming out we fall apart Crying now we lost all cause Bloody yells, our heart to pause Never starting, our life will end Never to begin again I'm crying out We're shouting now Hear us, feel us It's not a virus We are people like you But nothing you do To try to help Caught within yourself You lack the power You lack the will To look around and see what's real. Like we do, we suffer Wishing for something But in return get nothing But fear this life of hate and pain Foggy clouds and skies of rain Hide us from the world they know Hold us captive to never show Who we are, who we wish we could be What we've done, what we want to see A world, not perfect but perfect enough We found ourselves that life is rough For us because we're different Because we aren't the same We have ideas you call insane But dreamers do what dreamers wish Til' shrouded upon your ego's mist We stand together to make us tall But split apart we feel so small We scream and shout Please hear us out I'm not just one For we are many But why do we feel so alone Because ignorant and selfish people Leaving us without a sequal Oh, how the world has changed Distant worlds and other places Stern looks and unfamiliar faces People we are without a group Left aside out of the loop We try to act strong Pretend to be calm Until the moment we're alone When we sing misery's song And scream out our lungs And our head then lays hung In shame and sadness In envy and madness Why can't we be happy Like you don't judge the cover of a book Don't dare judge me for how I look We're different, we're unique We're odd ones, so you speak But I am not you, nor will I ever For people like cause lives to sever Create a world for everyone like us To live with people like you equally To live our lives peacefully So we write our songs So we write our poems We write about love and bad omens Call us losers but we are not You don't know me but give it a shot Because I tried to know you, you shot me down Just then now I wear a frown So we want to try to live in harmony A life to live with you and me As equals as one Our quest is far from done.

1. Do you sing, play an instrument or instruments? I sing, only sing. I'm wanting to learn BASS. I began singing when I was young and learned I had poetic skills when I was 10. Since then I began to try and write lyrics and such. 2. Are you in a band or bands? I call myself Thus Becomes. I need a band because right now I electronically produce my music and thats just not what Im looking for. I do vocals and most of my music is Acoustic with slight Electric every now and then. 3. Do you write songs? I ONLY write lyrics. I try to write music but it's just not my thing. I'm looking for someone to help write the music for my songs. 4. Do you record your music? I'm wanting to record my music as soon as I can. Theres just so much I need to do first before I can be heard. 5. What other roles do you perform in the music business? I dont do much. 6. Are you a tech head? Im not sure what the question is asking. I know how to use a computer very well though. 7. What country do you live in? United States 8. What are your ambitions? I want to sing, I want to be heard, and I want to have fun doing it. No deadlines, no hurrying. just having fun. 9. Do you draw/paint/write stories/computer art/dance or other creative pursuit? I draw extremely well, i design my own album art and other album art for local bands. I write stories for people and Im currently writing a book. 10. What would you like to get out of Songstuff? I would like to be heard. That is what I would like from Songstuff. I want to be heard, I want to get going and be a band. But also what I would like is to meet other bands, collaborate, and share ideas and styles.