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Posts posted by goldylocks
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Satan's Got the Show
Verse:
Furious eyes shoot anger
Haunted by glaring light
Orange, blazing fingers
Torch the black night
Verse:
Demons of Pyromania
Scramble far and near
Hearing crackling sounds
It's music to their ears
Chorus
Satan's got the show
See the flames grow
Can't put the fire out
No, no, no
Satan's got the show
See the flames glow
Can't put the fire out
No, no, no
Bridge:
"You can go straight to Hell"
A rioter screams out loud
He signs the Devil's horns
Wildly mocking the crowd
Chorus:
Satan's got the show
See the flames grow
Can't put the fire out
No, no, no
Satan's got the show
See the flames glow
Can't put the fire out
No, no, no
Ending Outro
Can't put the fire out
Satan's got the show
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Very pretty song Goldy.
Les
Thanks Les, I hope your job hunting is successful. Whoever hires you will be lucky to have a committed person like you!
Goldy
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Maybe you live Avery gentle life, Goldy:
Johnnie is Johnnie Walker scotch whisky,
Jim is Jim Beam bourbon,
The Captain is Captain Morgan rum and
Jack is Jack Daniels Tennessee Whisky.
It isn't a funny situation because since she left him, he's developed a drinking problem.
40 ounces is the imperial measurement for a litre!
K
Yeah, I really missed the mark! I don't drink, so I totally missed the meaning. I thought you were referring to room mates, that's why I was referring to Olson Wilson and Ben Stiller, now I see it's not so funny. Sorry Kel. Duh, it went over my head.
Goldy
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"I ate Eight"
Well slap my knee, whats for dinner/didn't think and was necessary
Maybe spam or eggs on toast.
I've tried so hard to be a winner
lose some weight of which i'd boast./don't need and
I've ran the K's, and popped some pills
Worked out hard, let's get this straight
I'm cutting back on donuts, instead on one /should it be of ?
I ate Eight.
It's a start....Lol MMmmm Doooooonuuuts
Welcome to the forum, Loyd, I see you have a good sense of humor! I like it, just needs more lyrics and it has the potential to be a very funny song.
Goldy
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Yes, the screecher is me, in all my inability to hold a tune.
Not sure why you see it is hilarious, but the reference to Toby Keith I love.
Thanks,
Kel
Why I see it as hilarious, is I can imagine Jack moves in and he's alright but Johnnie moves in and lets the, dishes and laundry pile up, because he doesn't want to be the house wife. So the men end up arguing, and he leaves, then Jim the next guy moves in, and everyone gets on each others nerves, fighting over the remote control, and so on, kind of like a revolving door, .The chorus is what made me think that way. It kind of refers the men couldn't stand living with each other, except for Jack.
I thought it was very humorous!
Goldy
Jack moved in when you moved outAnd it looks like he's here to stay.Johnnie came and went again,Jim could only take me half way,When the Captain couldn't set me freeThere was nothin else I could do,Jack has been taking good care of meIn a forty ounce dose of gettin' over you. -
Nice one Goldy. I see elegance in the simplicity. Bravo!
Kel
Thanks Kel, for the lovely compliment! I saw Number One Girl in my mind's eye and wrote it as I saw her. A beautiful black race horse, blue ribbon winner!
Goldy
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Forty Ounce DoseJack moved in when you moved outAnd it looks like he's here to stay.Johnnie came and went again,Jim could only take me half way,When the Captain couldn't set me freeThere was nothin else I could do,Jack has been taking good care of meIn a forty ounce dose of gettin' over you.When you packed your bags and slammed the doorYou left a man who had no idea.As your tyres spun in the drivewayI was gettin' me another beer.Jack moved in when you moved outAnd it looks like he's here to stay.Johnnie came and went again,Jim could only take me half way,When the Captain couldn't set me freeThere was nothin else I could do,Jack has been taking good care of meIn a forty ounce dose of gettin' over you.All the boys complained when I didn't join inFor the regular Tuesday night game.I was deuces wild at the twist and shoutAnd still don't remember her name.Jack moved in when you moved outAnd it looks like he's here to stay.Johnnie came and went again,Jim could only take me half way,When the Captain couldn't set me freeThere was nothin else I could do,Jack has been taking good care of meIn a forty ounce dose of gettin' over you.They come and go but the truth be toldThey aren't the woman you are at all.Jack has been taking good care of meIn a forty ounce dose of...Jack moved in when you moved outAnd it looks like he's here to stay.Johnnie came and went again,Jim could only take me half way,When the Captain couldn't set me freeThere was nothin else I could do,Jack has been taking good care of meIn a forty ounce dose of gettin' over you.
Kel, this is hilarious, this something I could picture Toby Keith singing or even could be a song for a movie with Owen Wilson and Vince Vaughn, Ben Stiller in the cast.. Very original, I laughed so hard when I listened to it. Is that you singing the demo? I noticed the singer has an accent.
A+ Goldy
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Thought I'd write something different, this time about a horse, an animal I think is magnificent!
Number One Girl
Verse:
She was a little filly
With wobbly knees
Chasing yellow butterflies
Flying in the breeze
Verse:
Now she's grown up
Into a graceful mare
With a shiny, black coat
Eating grass without care
Chorus:
Number One Girl
A blue ribbon queen
Flying down the track
Like a racing machine
Her hooves thunder
As they hit the ground
Pushing her ahead
Of every horse around
Verse:
She'd prance and whine
At the starting gate
When they fired the gun
She'd never hesitate
Chorus:
Number One Girl
A blue ribbon queen
Flying down the track
Like a racing machine
Her hooves thunder
As they hit the ground
Pushing her ahead
Of every horse around
Verse:Many years have passedI still see her brown eyesNow, she's in HeavenRacing through the skiesEnding ChorusNumber One GirlAt night can be seenRacing across the starsA blue ribbon queenGoldy
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Hi Goldy,
I like the simple wish to do something worthwhile... nice.
The final line of the chorus twists my head a little... you change tense... all through the chorus you're speaking past tense, then back to present in that last line. If you try the word "died" all would be right.
Nicely done.
K
Thanks Kel, for your keen observation, and nice comments I changed it to died. I get my tenses mixed up all the time, it gets so confusing sometimes. Also, as I said to Vagda, I wanted to write something positive that would lift people's spirits up!
Goldy
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Good job done on the challenge
Such a positive song!! After reading it I feel so much power and energy going trough me.
Thanks Vagda, for the nice comments. I wanted to write something with a positive message, about caring about other people. That in fact, we should be our brothers keeper!
Goldy
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Well this challenge turned out a real challenge!
Not to keen on my offering but I am done, no chorus as I thought I would have but may try to finish one and add it.
All you guys who have posted songs, they are really good well done and that is meant as a real compliment as I know how difficult this has been! for me anyway.
Hairy Hound
I have a hairy hound called Willy
I love that big ole dog so much
He is super soft, soppy n silly
And I like to feel his furry touch
One day Willy went weird n wild
I had to keep him locked indoors
He bit Billy Bob next doors child
I couldn’t let him out no more
Despite all my doubts I had decided
Ole Willy boy was getting worse
To keep him kenneled up killed me
I knew he had some doggy curse
I considered a careful course of action
As I didn’t want to let him down
To try and find a fix for my friend
I took him to the vets in town
I pulled up and paid for parking
Right outside the clinic front door
Willy got agitated, anxious and worried
As he had seen this place before
The vet verified a viral infection
Nothing that he could not treat
Over joyed over charged over excited/ I love this line, especially over charged. Ha! Ha! isn't it the truth!
I went and danced in the street
B
Now Willy’s fine and he’s back to health
And he runs around the yard all day
I'm glad I didn’t lose the best friend I have
I'm glad that he’s here to stay
Les, you did exactly what a song is suppose to do, tell a story. The first verse you describe Willy and draw us in with your love for the dog. The next verse you hold us captive with what's going to happen to Willy after he bites Billy Bob's child. The next 2 verses you build the suspense as to what course of action your going to take. The final 2 verses you charm us with your sense of humor and delightful ending of the song! Very well written, I would say it's a humorous Children's song in my opinion.
Great Job! It made me laugh and I loved it!
Goldy
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After reading what Kel had I got inspiration some way.
So here it is. Don't have alliterations in my bridge, is that a problem?
Forgive me
Verse:
Lost, like leaves that linger through the street
Wandering on the waves of the wind
The air still smells so sweet
It must be all in my mind
Verse:
Dreams of dead darken my days, night after night
All alone I awake again in bed
Can't turn this wrong to right
These thoughts wear so heavy in my head
Chorus:
Forgive me for wanting
One last kiss
Forgive me for seeking
A way to have what I miss
Forgive me, forgive me
I can't let go of this
Verse:
Running, round and round, retracing our steps
But your figure fades so fast
Maybe it is time to accept
I must leave you in the past
Chorus:
Forgive me for wanting
One last kiss
Forgive me for seeking
A way to have what I miss
Forgive me, forgive me
I can't let go of this
Bridge:
The car came, crashed so fast
Were you in pain
Did you cry before you passed
I remember the last thing I said/ I whispered these words with my breath
'I love you forever, forever and beyond dead' beyond dead doesn't seem to fit. It takes away the poetic language that you are portraying in your beautiful lyrics./ I'll love you forever and forever beyond death
Chorus:
Forgive me for wanting
One last kiss
Forgive me for seeking
A way to have what I miss
Forgive me, forgive me
I must let go of this
Vagda, this is sad, but lovely and, very well written with a lot of emotional projection. Your song gave a picture of someone tormented with grief who lost a lover in a car crash. This is one of your best! One nit I had was the two last lines in the bridge in blue above marked in the lyrics.
Still a moving and beautiful song!
Goldy
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Here goes...
Catch of the Day!
I went to the river with my fishing pole,Baited the line, cast into the hole.To my suprise what happened nextWas the biggest damn prize I've had in my net!Tony the Trout took the bait real fine,Swivelled and swerved and sweated the line,He zigged and he zagged and zigged again,But I rocked and I rolled and I reeled him in!I told my buddy 'bout my angling score,Didn't believe what I put in store.So he wanted evidence and I can't blame,If he told me the story I'd be wanting the same!Headed home with a half baked planOf providing proof of my pelagic hamI looked and I loaded and I laid it thickAnd I did the deed and I dared a trick.Everyone knows that a fisherman's truthAin't exactly the same as a chicken's tooth!I called my partner said to come round quickI had all I needed that would do the trickOut the back there was a table laidAnd on a silver platter was the catch of the day!Mango curry and mild mint sauceAnd some great green grapes, peeled of course.He balked then he buttered a corn bran bunAnd he fed on the fish from the market run.Kel, the older you get, you're like an aged bottle of wine. Pouring yourself out into your writing! Terrific song, I loved the clever humor and lyrics. Especially the second and last verse.
Great Job! Goldy
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Here is my effort
Live in the Moment
Verse:
I'm whirling in the wind with life
Embracing every exciting day
Blowing away clouds of sorrow
Lady love is leading the way
Verse:
Tame thoughts teach me peace
When panic pushes problems near
I'm treading on my faith
Holding my head above fearChorus:
I'm making my life count
Before my last breath
I live in the moment
I live in the moment
Before I'm laid to rest
Tomorrow is unpredictable
Like a red rose fading away
I live in the moment
I live in the moment
I'm living for todayVerse:
My sunny smile shines in the world
On all the people who pass me by
I hold the hurting hand of someone
Wiping tears away from their eyesBridge:
When I look back at time
I wont be sad or even sigh
I'll remember all those years
I made a difference before I diedChorus:
I'm making my life count
Before my last breath
I live in the moment
I live in the moment
Before I'm laid to rest
Tomorrow is unpredictable
Like a red rose fading away
I live in the moment
I live in the moment
I'm living for todayGoldy
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Been quite ill, Just stopped by for a minute to wish Kel a HAPPY BIRTHDAY!!!!
Goldy
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I found this to be difficult, but challenging, so I went for it. Any suggestions are appreciated.
Redemption Song
Him
I thought I 'd make a comeback
I miss the lights, flashing our name
Memories of you and me together
Not the songs that brought us fame
Her
Why do you think I'd work with you ?
You left town for a better fate
When you sang, you were never on time
Your womanizing, made you late
Him
I took the wrong fork in the road
Open your heart, give us one more try
Remember how we harmonized?
Fans were screaming, for you and I
Him
Let's sing together, do you remember when?
Her
Yeah, when you deserted me and our friends
Him
I lost my mind, liquor caused me to drown
Her
What if you drink again, and pull me down?
Him
Didn't you read, how I crashed and nearly died
Her
So, you've changed and now you're gonna' try?
Him
The Lord saved me, just wait and you'll see
Her
I forgive you, but I know there's no guarantee
Him
We'll sing a redemption song, you and me
Him
Sing about faith and bring em' to their knees
Him
With you standing by my side we'll both be strong
Him
We'll talk about forgiving in our redemption song
Her
We'll tell em' it's their soul they could lose
Her
They 'll think twice before they choose
Her
Tell em' to walk the straight and narrow way
Her
Look up to Heaven, if they think they'll stray
Chorus Together Repeat 2X
Will sing a redemption song you and me
About a God who died to set us free
Tell em' to love and forgive everyone
Seek the Father and His only Son
Love your neighbor the best you can
And give the poor a helping hand
Will sing a redemption song you and me
About a God who who died to set us free
Goldy
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Thanks everybody, for your encouragement. #1,was nice while it lasted, for 2 days. Oh, well, see what I mean about fame being a hard road. Lol. The road just took a detour down to 3. "C'est la vie!
Goldy
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Thank you all for being so supportive! That's why I love Songstuff's Lyric Challenge.
Goldy .
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Hey everybody, not to brag but my songs have put me in #1 in Phoenix Arizona, for Christian Rock.
I know it won't last. But, it sure feels good! Her'es the link! My name is Into the Light.
Thanks John, and all the rest of you, it's because of the challenges!Goldy -
Okay Kel, I'm going to make a few comments, . I like both your songs, I think they're fresh teen pop type lyrics. The second one seems more mature than the first one, a coming of age song, is what I mean. Justine recognizes the worth of the very beloved man Mandela and inspires to be like him. I can see the transition, from girl to more of a woman. Nice touch!
Goldy
Just a Tool
I see you struttin' round town
In your backward cap,
Acting as if you're a real cool cat.
But I know better,
You're just a scared little boy
Yeah, it's just an act,
Yeah, that's a fact.
You got your entourage
But you don't have me,
And now you know that you never will.
And I know somethin'
You don't want your fans to know
Yeah, but you can chill
Yeah, wait until...
RAP
I update my status and you're out in the cold
I found a real man and the truth be told
He's way better lookin' and he's got some moves,
He's in his own class yeah the man is smooth.
We saw you spit on your fans
Boy that ain't so cool
And nobody now will even follow you.
And I know somethin'
And the world will soon know it too,
Yeah, you is just a fool/did you mean is or is it a typo? You're sounds better, unless your a home', lol.
Yeah, just a tool.
Obviously, the "event" is the infamous spitting on his fans incident that one Canadian teenage pop "star" seems to think is a great way to act, and maybe he is also the tool?
Oh, and Justine obviously has a new beau...
 
Remembered
I saw the news today
Told of a great man passing
I want to be remembered that way.
All I do is sing
Don't fix anything
How can I be remembered that way?
As I walk on the stage
I beam my sweetest smile
I want to be remembered this way.
When I start my show
Everybody knows
How can I be remembered this way?
RAP
I know you're there and always will be
By my side ready to support me
I want to leave a legacy
That's greatest than the world has seen...
And in the news today
A singer tries to change the world.
How I want to be remembered this way.
All I do is sing
My music has to bring
A way for me to be remembered this way.
Nelson Mandela's passing is the event as you probably guessed, and in this one Justine is expressing her wish to be remembered as he is. And hopefully she will choose this song to do it...
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Thanks Kel, for your comments, I changed it to Red Carpet Ball. I believe that's 10 syllables. I used the syllable counter for the other one too, but I guess it doesn't include MTV. I also changed the title, you always keep me on my toes and I appreciate it,
Goldy
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My first song,.UnstoppableVerseWhen I saw you at the Red Carpet ballI was lost in your blue, blue eyesYou smiled and winked at meMy feelings took me over by surpriseMy face began to flush, turning bright redLike a school girl with her first crushI felt my heart flutterBlood ran all through my veins in such a rushChorusUnstoppableYes,unstoppableI'm fallingI'm trapped,Like a bird in a snareThere's no way out of thisWhen I close my eyesI can taste our first kissVerse:Even, Obama wants to hear you singDressed up in your famous disguiseBut all I want to knowIs if your really a sincere guyChorus:UnstoppableYes, unstoppableI'm fallingI'm trappedLike a bird in a snareThere's no way out of thisWhen I close my eyesI can taste our first kissRapYour more to me than a boy that's only just a flirtIf you know my secret I'm afraid that I'll get hurtIt's unstoppable and I'll have to take chance with youYou dazzle me like a star, there's nothing I can doGoldySecond songFames a Hard RideI read about famous ones like meOverwhelmed with wrong desiresTeenagers who committed suicideLet drugs consume them up like fireThat's why I want you to be in my lifeI can't sing in the light aloneIf temptation knocks at my doorIt won't find me all on my ownFames a hard rideIt drives you out of realityTakes you to a life of luxuryYou climb false stairsLeading to a downfallFalling in a deep holeWhile money robs your soulFames a hard rideI wish I could tell you just how I feelChills run up and down on my spineI see your face in the tabloidsI dream about making you mine.Fame's a hard rideIt drives you out of realityTakes you to a life of luxuryYou climb false stairsLeading to a downfallFalling a deep holeWhile money robs your soulFames a hard rideRap
Even though we both are on the same fame ride
We can help each other standing side by side
Keeping ourselves balanced talking every day
Then life doesn't have to sweep us both away
Goldy
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John, what's next?
Goldy
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Thank you Rudi, you made my husband's day, with such a lovely compliment. I can see why you listen to Reverend Davis, he's very authentic in gospel singing and playing his guitar. I can see why he's a favorite of yours. By the way I liked your voice, it's mellow and smooth, very nice, from what I could hear.
Goldy
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Challenge #25 - There Goes The Neighbourhood
in Writing Challenges
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Vagda, I think your first song relates well to the male standing defiantly signing the crowd. It has good descriptive imagery. With a few tweaks it will be very good! As always your writing brings strong emotion and you express yourself well!
Goldy