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Been very ill this last few weeks but,I wanted to wish you all a Happy Thanksgiving! Sandy

Could that be me? What a nice gesture, and an adorable song! Also a nice tribute to Songstuff! Sandy

James, you never cease to amaze me with your diversity and talent. Very creative write and fun song! Sandy

Thanks Jan for commenting, I think you have a pretty good lyric also! Nice testimonial for Songstuff ! Maybe a tweak here and there. But what i like about your writing is you always write lyrics concise and not too wordy. Goldy

Jan what is your title of the song? Also, I think your chorus is not strong enough bringing your verses together. That's just my opinion of course...Maybe bring part of your bridge and chorus together like this suggestion or something like this.. Title suggestion Songstuff Friends. Just trying to help, keep or sweep. Chorus . Great minds think alike, not trying to pretend Honestly, honesty is what we get from them Some of our critics are now our Songstuff friends Goldy

Challenge # 44 Songstuff You're the World to Me Verse: Give me an S, O, N, G, S, T, U, F, F Now what have you got everybody A place to write and express yourself And let your imagination run free Verse: From every country all over the world Songwriters, Lyricists write their songs Country, Rock, Blues, and Rap, Hip Hop Hoping a record contract will come along Chorus Songstuff You're the world to me I appreciate the people who critique Giving their advice with just a tweak A few simple words scribbled down Can have meaning and be profound Verse: Let's not forget the Songstuff starter Who oversees the writing forum every day Give the man from Scotland three cheers Shout out a loud, Hip, Hip, Hip, Hooray! Verse: Who would dare to close Songstuff down Will have a cyberspace war on their hands Voices would rise up in anger everywhere Every song writer would take a stand Chorus Songstuff You're the world to me I appreciate the people who critique Giving their advice with just a tweak A few simple words scribbled down Can have meaning and be profound ,Verse: So people keep on writing your songs Let the words and musical melodies flow Never give up on your writing dreams One day you might have your own show

Jan, I gave this explanation, which tells why they split. She was jealous of a girl that was a friend and she was insecure in herself with his love. She thought he was being unfaithful. female I know you told me that girl was just a friend I won't be jealous and fight with you like before I'll trust you and never shut our bedroom door We'll be lovers until the end of time I won't remember yesterday, it's the past I know your love is faithful and it'll last Goldy

​Jan, I really like how you have this lyric tight and concise with wording. You say what you need to say with emotion. As I was reading it, I could actually see two people in love standing face to face trying to salvage their relationship. I thought you did an excellent job! It might need a tweak here and there, but that is totally up to you. I liked it the way it is. Goldy

James, my husband Mike and I listened to this and couldn't stop laughing! How creative and what a fun song I loved it. Missed all of you! Well written! It takes two goldy

This is the trimmed down Version # 2 Challenge #43 I took a lot out, I think it sounds better, thanks for commenting Les, it's nice to be back! It's Going to Be a Long, Long Night .Verse Male I was hitching a ride out of town Feeling a little lonely and sorry for myself When you showed up in a pickup truck Opened up the door and told me to get in My heart fell to the floor when you smiled at me You grabbed my hand, then suddenly I could see Chorus Male by himself It's going to be a long, long night It's going to be a long, long night Cause baby I'll be kissing, hugging and holding you tight The way I used to do It's going to be a long, long night It's going to be a long, long night Cause baby when you're in my arms, I'll be making it right When I make love to you Verse Male The other day you flew into a rage Threw our love away, and wouldn't calm down Told me to leave, you didn't want me around Now you say you want me back home again There is nothing in this world I want more Then you wearing your wedding ring like before Verse: female I know you told me that girl was just a friend I won't be jealous and fight with you like before I'll trust you and never close our bedroom door We'll be lovers until the end of time I won't remember yesterday, it's the past I know your love is faithful and it'll last Verse: Female We can build that home in the country You and I dreamed about under a blue, sky We'll live our lives just like the Fourth of July Now, that I know that you feel the same way When you said you'd came back home yesterday And that you missed me and wanted to stay Chorus Male and Female singing together It's going to be a long, long night It's going to be a long, long night Cause baby I'll be kissing, hugging and holding you tight The way I used to do It's going to be a long, long night It's going to be a long, long night Cause baby when you're in my arms, I'll be making it right When I make love to you Outra Chorus It's going be a long, long night It's going be a long, long night Cause baby when you're in my arms, I'll be making it right When I make love to you Repeat last two lines fading out

Challenge #43 It's Going to Be a Long, Long Night It's been awhile, thought I would give it shot. Verse Male I was hitching a ride on the road out of town Feeling a little lonely and sorry for myself When you showed up in our pickup truck Opened up the door and told me to get in My heart fell to the floor when you smiled at me You grabbed my hand, then suddenly I could see Chorus Male by himself It's going to be a long, long night It's going to be a long, long night Cause baby I'll be kissing, hugging and holding you tight The way I used to do It's going to be a long, long night It's going to be a long, long night Cause baby when you're in my arms, I'll be making it right When I make love to you Verse Male The other day you walked out and flew into a rage Threw our marriage away like a rose fading on the ground Told me to pack up and leave, you didn't want me around Now you say you want me to come back home again There is nothing in the world I could hope for more Then you wearing your gold wedding ring like before Verse: female I was wrong not to trust you and believe in your love If we are ever argue and get into a fight like before I'll never hurt you darling and close our bedroom door We'll be best friends and lovers until the end of time I won't remember the day we parted, it's in the past Cause I know your love is faithful and I know it'll last Verse: Female We can build that country home and have horses You and I dreamed about under a blue, sunny sky We'll live our lives lit up, just like the Fourth of July Now, that I know that you feel the same way as I do When you said you'd came back home the other day And said you missed me terribly and wanted to stay Chorus Male and Female singing together It's going to be a long, long night It's going to be a long, long night Cause baby I'll be kissing, hugging and holding you tight The way I used to do It's going to be a long, long night It's going to be a long, long night Cause baby when you're in my arms, I'll be making it right When I make love to you Outra Chorus It's going be a long, long night It's going be a long, long night Cause baby when you're in my arms, I'll be making it right When I make love to you Repeat last two lines fading out

James, very bluesy, nice simple write. Says what it needs with emotions without being over wordy. I have to say I like this one better. The more you write the better you're becoming! I always enjoy your songs. Goldy

Sgtsoul, this is very well written! You can not only envision the misery the betrayed person has experienced but also feel the pain. I really like your bridge, a lot of raw emotion. Especially these lines. The whole song actually vibrates with emotion! The flames consume me waiting here to die alone ….so my pain will go unspoken Take another piece from the heart that never learns Pour some gasoline onto the fire that still burns Nice Write! Goldy

Nice to meet you Sgtsoul, and thank you for commenting on my lyric,. Thanks again Goldy

Thanks James I will read about the information. I don't know if it will help cause I took that free Pat Pattison course and when he started on that I got very confused watching the videos. But thanks for the info. Goldy

James thank you, as always you are such a great help and I followed all your suggestions. I have tried to understand stressed and unstressed syllable, but I still find it confusing. Thanks again Goldy

Hey James, I really liked your song, and especially the way you arranged the music and used a Bible story to write it.. Very nice! Good to hear your songs and visit with you for a while. Goldy

For years I've seen them walking the streets Looking for handouts and something to eat Their gnarled fingers riffling garbage bins In shabby jackets with purple heart pins. Heroes who would not fall down to the enemy Soldiers of courage betrayed by society Wrestling horrific memories feverishly every night Battling nameless faces in a phantom fight Hiding in a storm of illusion a terrorized veteran Clutching a dripping liquor bottle in their hands Numbing the pain of people's glaring stares Knowing the life they have is going nowhere Who are these betrayed soldiers? Those sent to fight for you and me Standing against all odds Bound to serve their country Let us never forget how much it cost Let us never forget how much they lost Giving honor for armed services done To brave men and women veterans

I won't be able to participate in the Challenges for awhile, as I'm fighting serious illness. But thanks John for all the previous ones that I enjoyed in the past. You truly are a wonderful mentor. Goldy

Les, so simple yet with such a powerful heartfelt message of love and care for our furry friends. Will comment more but I'm not doing to well today. Talk to you soon My best to you Goldy

Hey Les, thank you I love it! It reads so much better, I wish I could get Robbie Dean to record this one, So I could donate it to the Christian charity. Lol. Where's yours? Goldy

Good to have you back Les, looking forward to reading your lyrics. I wonder what happened to Kel, and Rudy, they haven't been on the board for quite a while. At least in the Challenges. Goldy

Thank you James for pointing that out to me, I used a lot of your suggestion for the chorus. And changed it to being less preachy, but I like the last two verses. The picture tags are from Blingee, it's free to join and then you can copy them for free. They have thousands of pictures for all kinds of occasions. http://blingee.com/ Goldy

http://www.christianrelief.org/ She's Our Sister, He's Our Brother Verse: Sister Susie's in the garbage Lookin' for something to eat Tired from life's battles Can't stand on her feet Verse: Brother Michael's angry Coming home from war Hates every body Can't fight it anymore Chorus: She's our sister, He's our brother Won't you reach out a hand? We can love one another If we take a stand She's our sister, He's our brother That's what I know Brother, Sister help us Please don't let them go Verse: Sister Mary has no family Makes money on the street Bruises cover her body Lives alone with defeat Verse: Brother John's a drinker Lost his job and his home His wife and kids left him Now all he does is roam Bridge: Give Sister Susie Something to eat Help sister Mary Get off the street Teach Brother Michael How to forgive Give Brother John A place to live Chorus: She's our sister, He's our brother Won't you reach out a hand? We can love one another If we take a stand She's our sister, He's our brother That's what I know Brother, Sister help us Make our family grow