[The Pentatonic Scale And The Human Brain.]

This is one of my favorite TED talks.

Here's an interesting thought along these lines: the exact same brain activity occurs when you remember a song or sound in your head as when you actually physically hear it, which is why I don't have perfect pitch (I developed relative pitch) but I can name notes out of thin air by thinking of the first note of my favorite Beatles songs.

 

For instance, if I need to sing a "D" I think "Words are flowing.." from Across the Universe.

I discovered this trick by accident when I started singing the next song in the silence between one album track and the next and noticed I was dead on pitch when the music actually started up.  

 

Then I just had to find 12 different songs whose first notes match each note of the chromatic scale.  What can I say, I'm a musical nerd.

[Review This Song "stellar"]

When I first started writing songs and asking what people thought about them I realized that most people were too polite to be helpful, so I rarely got good feedback that could help me improve.

 

I want you to think about this: "What are your favorite songs, lyrically, and what do those songwriters do that you admire.?"

 

Here are some things that can make this song even better:

 1. The best songs are easy to sing because they flow like conversation

would you say "Asking them directions of where you are," or would it be more natural to say "asking for directions to find out where your are" or keep the line the same and replace "for" with "to"

 

2. Stick to a narrative- you're gonna hate me for this one; once we notice it, it's hard to ignore (and if you're like me, you hate rewriting good/finished songs):

 

"I know she changed position,

I can tell it from the stars;
You received my transmission,
She can't be far;
In the course of our collision,

You are talking directly to/with someone, but it confuses your listener when you suddenly mention "she."  are you talking to the subject of the song or about the subject?  Be careful not to flip flop

 

3. Even though we can break the rules of English, we still need to have complete thoughts

You have  a few sentence fragments in this song:

-Hoping you can give me

-I wish the constellation

-Coz in this side of the universe, if you may,

Where all the constellations are asking;
If you'd like to stay.

This last one doesn't make sense, I know you want to rhyme, but its ok if part of a rhyming section doesn't rhyme towards the end, the chords and resolution of the melody give it enough closure to make up for a lack of rhyme.

 

Keep up the writing!  You have clearly connected with people here, and that's a gift that the best songwriters possess.