Hi Rev,
You've got the right idea going here and I particularly like the line "so tired of chasing flowers that wilt away" However, the rest, I feel is low on content. With just two small verses, you aren't saying much, it almost feels over before you've really started if that makes sense. Take a look at all the previous lyrics, there is so much that can and should be said, thought or felt in such a personal disaster as a break-up. I think this song should be expanded to give it more depth. Just my 2 cents and keep at it!