Hey Anthony.
I am new here too and I am not very versed in Critique other's songs but I thought I'd let you know that I really liked your version of that song. I'd actually never heard the original before. I know as musicians listening to our own stuff can be a little ADHD'y picking it apart but for the most part, it was a nice listen. There was a video I saw a while back where Jack White was talking about his favorite song, and it is basically just a guy singing a song and clapping his hands. The notes weren't perfect and the recording is/sounds old, and it's fantastic because of how human it is. It kind of changed my view a bit on what music could or should be. So when I hear songs like you made, I tend to like the weird sounds, flat notes, or timing issues because it's human. And I like that about it.
Good job.
Edit: I found the video -