Dee

Black Velvet - Alana Miles

Tell It to My Heart - Taylor Dane

Hello Rewrite here. Something funny happened that I will share. Whilst I was checking through it and reading my meter, the electricity man came to read my meter. Get it? Hmm.... maybe you had to be here. I nearly said to him "Can your machine SCANsion my meter too?" but I refrained. Didn't think he'd understand. Anyway enough of thinking myself witty. Here we are - hope I've got the meter right. Though a fresh pair of eyes is always helpful Make it Happen © Denielle West. May 2011 Ambition fuels a furnace That burns deep in my soul Belief that I can turn this Dream into gold A dream that keeps me focussed When doubt creeps in my mind And blunts my sense of purpose Part of the time (Rise) I must believe I will achieve (Chorus) See my colours Rise higher than others I will make it happen Hear my song Knowing I belong I will make it happen (Verse 2) I visualize the glory The crowds calling my name Ill make this my own story Winning the game To reach my finest moment Ill race against the rest Amongst the tide of talent Ill be the best (Rise) This is my time My chance to shine (chorus)

Forever Autumn - Justin Hayward

Hi JD yep. I'm working on it Will post soon Dee

School's out for Summer - AC/DC?

The fog is evaporating, Lazz. Your words, like rays of sunlight are burning it away. When I was writing the above, it did feel more like poetry than lyric but I did write it like that for a reason - back to basics. Trying to remember what I learnt in school - a long time ago - (emphasis on long). So now I've got the basics, I can build. Yes, it does seem easier to write to established melodies but for the time being I shall keep practising meter writing music-less because, as I keep telling my children, practise makes perfect. However they don't believe me and think they should be able to do most things at the first time of trying - I have no idea who they get that trait from I shall read your recommendations and I might even throw in one of my own. Irving Berlin. I remember watching loads and loads of musicals with my mum whenever they came on t.v. and now my children have had their first taste of what I grew up watching. I have Calamity Jane on DVD and they watched it for the first time last week. I heard my five year old son the other day signing "Nut Cracker Way!" Anyway - thanks again for reading and replying and helping and being very patient with me. It's much appreciated!! Kind regards Dee

Where Have all the Cowboys Gone - Paula Cole

Hi Donna Thanks for your comments. If I changed: to PROVE i AM the BEST (da DUM da DUM da DUM) to: to PROVE that I'M the BEST (it's still da DUM da DUM da DUM) otherwise this: to PROVE I am the BEST would be - (da DUM DUM da da DUM) I'm trying to keep the emphasis in the same places in lines 1 and 3 and lines 2 and 4 which, I believe has been my problem all along.

Hello Over the holidays I've been reading as much as I can about meter and stresses and syllables etc and I think I may (no promises)have cracked it as such. There are still one or two questions like those little one syllable words for example: I, the, this, are these stressed? Anyway I have re-written a couple of the verses taking into account what I think I have learnt. However the words aren't that great but really this is an exercise in meter writing for me and keeping it consistEnt. AmBITion BURNS inSIDE my SOUL To PROVE i AM the BEST (is "am" stressed?) My FOcus LIES upON this GOAL I’m READy FOR the TEST At TIMES I’ve CRIED, at TIMES I’ve BLED I’ve ALmost GIVen UP But NOW i SEE that PRIZE aHEAD i KNOW i CANnot STOP The WEIGHT of EXpecTAtion’s GREAT Its LOAD I HAVE to BEAR i HAVE to RHYME this LINE with ONE aGAIN this LINE with TWO Sorry about the last two lines, as I say it just an exercise for me. The frustrating thing for me is I know how easy it's meant to be and I'm kicking myself for not "getting it". I would really like to conquer this. So, am I any closer? I really value any opinons. Not about the words though. I'm finding it hard not to write anything cheesy. Though I suspect a song of inspiration for this type of event lends itself to cheese. Thanks Dee

The Things We Do for Love - 10cc

Who Says You Can't Go Home - Bon Jovi

I Know Him so Well - Elaine Page and Barbara Dickson

Naked in the Rain - Blue Pearl

Quick update - the re-write is coming along. We're in the middle of Easter holidays here in UK so my focus has been on kids and the super summer-like weather. I love the warm weather so much. I really do. Here's a picture of me with my shades on Anyway back soon.

Colours of the Wind - Vanessa Williams

Red red wine - UB40

The sun always shines on tv - aha

I don't want to be a hero - jonny hates jazz

Holding out for a Hero - Bonnie Tyler

Work for the working man - bon jovi.

Ring My Bell - Anita Ward

Pretty paper - Roy orbison

Fool if you think It's over - blimey, now who sang that? Was it Chris rea?