Hi Butcher,
Sorry it's taken a while to get a reply going.....sometimes life has a way of getting in the way.
Great writes. You seem very comfortable with using the senses and writing with concrete images.
These are really just nitpicks. In fact, without having a listen, I don’t think I’d suggest changing much at all.
For "Fall"
I'm not sure of the connection with the deer in the first and last verse....at first, the singer likes hunting deer....at the end "sees" a deer....maybe the assumption is that the singer will have a gun, but the line above is referring to joyriding in the jeep instead of hunting.
For "Winter"
I like the build up to the last line....that one does a good job of expressing the emotion
...wouldn't the days be getting shorter in winter instead of longer?.....then again after reading “Summer†I think you are saying it’s the end of Winter....maybe clarify that
For Spring
It looks good on the lyrics.....I'm not sure about the labeling verse, chorus, bridge....maybe Section A, B, C.....but without hearing it I couldn't tell....they all seem fairly balanced throughout, so again I don't know where the contrast would come without hearing it.
For Summer
To clarify the ending of the season.....
But now The days are getting shorter and shorter.
Again, overall, great job! What music do you hear for these lyrics?
Thanks for sharing.
James