I Am Born To An Avalanche

[67nick]

I am born to an avalanche

It’s burning red and cold

Enraged like the fiery sun

For no reasons at all

You make it look so authentic now

Spitting colors of gold

I drifted with your lava flow

Underneath the river floor

My heart is made of molten rock

A dead smoldering soul

Don’t show me your ragged clothes

I know that you are not broke

This is your world, you brought me here

It is your flesh that I wear

Flowing rivers have crippled me now

Yet I manage to stay afloat

I am born to an avalanche

It’s dark and so cold

Nick Kler

[Mazrocon]

It is very interesting... I read it a few times to get the over all meaning of the song. I really like it!

"I drifted with your lava flow

Underneath the river floor"

I love this hook right here! I liked how you ended and started with the title.

I think one the problems I had with the poem was the images of snow and lava... it seems like 2 conflicting theme's... "It’s burning red and cold" this line is the only line I didn't fully understand "red and cold"

Overall it's a well written poem, I like your ability to say alot with using very few words.

Keep up the good work!

~TIMOTHY~

[typo]

really liked this. gotta say it was the title that hooked me...