Challenge #37 - New Lyrics Please

[john]

Hi Gang

Your mission, should you choose to accept it, is to pick a Beatles song and write completely new lyrics for it, and then find a co-writer from the boards to write a new melody for your lyrics... WITHOUT telling them the song that inspired the lyrics.

You can:

Base your song on the same fundamental emotion as the original (recommended)

Post up your finished lyrics. DO NOT REVEAL WHAT SONG INSPIRED THEM.

Post your audio and lyrics together. Invite group members to guess the Beatles song that inspired your song

You cannot:

Have your song on the same topic as the original.

Your song cannot use any line or partial line or equivalent line to the original

It must have a completely different title. Ie do not call your song "While my piano softly sobs"

Critique is NOT PERMITTED until after July 12th for lyrics and after July 19th for the completed song. The reason is to have you deliver your best standard lyrics where you try to work through the issues YOU see in order to evolve your song. Note, the lyrics you submit on the 12th should be the lyrics that are recorded.

Once all songs are submitted we will have a member poll (site, not group) to select the favourite song.

Deadline is Saturday 12th July for the lyrics, and Saturday 19th July for the completed song.

Submit your finished lyrics and song in a thread titled Challenge #37 - Your Song Name.

Have fun!

This topic will self destruct within 5 seconds of reading. 5, 4, 3....

Cheers

John

[jamestoffee]

Here is my lyric submission for the challenge:

 

http://forums.songstuff.com/topic/38274-challenge-37-mr-right/

 

John,

 

Please post a link to the collaboration request area.....

 

"find a co-writer from the boards to write a new melody for your lyrics"

 

I only see an area for collaboration showcase.

 

Thanks,

 

James

 

 

[louielouwhy]

John.  A composer had completed a score for these lyrics for this challenge with some modifications.  Not a recording.  At least not one that I could find.  I informed him to paste it here, since I couldn't.  Sorry it is late.  Actually these lyrics were completed well ahead of schedule.  And.  Possibly the score that I mentioned, also.  Completed by SevenSeas.  Just discovered them minutes ago, though.  Now what's the deal?  Do we identify the Beatles song for critique?  Or.  Is it unacceptable?

 

Song Challenge #37

A LION SEEKING WHOM HE CAN DEVOUR

 

A lion stayed till last call

With the rum

There

That they was sipping

 

(chorus)

Causing some drunks to frankly speak

 

They keep blaming meanly as they still are drinking

 

(chorus)

Now the drunkards franticly speak

 

The lion infers to hilariously deter them

So they don't know whose drink to drink

His mission egregiously deceives them into loathing

Fools!

To ruin their friendships for eternity

 

(pre chorus)

I looked at the dudes

And their tempers were flaring

 

While the drunkards frankly speak

 

With every sip, they are shaking

I see their tempers meeting

 

(chorus)

As the drunkards frantically speak

 

They both swing around

Enhancing the disturbance

The bouncer was alerted to

A show down

Causing injury

Over a stolen brew

 

(bridge/chorus)

As one drunkard lays severely beat

 

Bouncer cries out last call

While that lion tips those drunkards drinks

 

More! More! More! More! More! More! More!

 

Mine! Mine!

 

Mine! Mine!

 

Mine! Mine!

 

More! More! More! Haha!

 

 

Edited July 22, 2014 by louielouwhy