Another One!

[iwishtorightasong]

[chorus]

i dont really like to think

while both my arms are turning pink

and all my blood is running down a sink

all of this cutting does hurt and it does cause pain

but it's the only mother f*cking thing

that will keep me from going insane

 

[verse 1]

 

when i cut, i knew that i was meant to do it, 

cause i thought that i was a mistake a counterfeit

and all of this cutting is what my other half urges

when i cut, even more of my blood surges

and from this blood a new part of me has emerged

now my two personalities have merged

 

[chorus]

 

 

 

[verse two]

 

all this stuff is in my brain,

ive gone insane

blood is my rain

my blood splattered on a window pane

a child beaten with a cane

 they profane

i do the same

i cant stand and watch this pain

id rather jump into a train

make a run

break down the lane

get bitten by a great Dane

im not strong 

my names not bane

there's nothing in this world to gain

im the lion

this is my mane

no one cares about my name

 

[chorus]

[bronzerebel]

Something that's really important in rap is to have an end goal to build on throughout you while verse. You have that but it'd be dope to see longer verses maybe something like 32 bars with some added complexity. Keep it up homie

[iwishtorightasong]

hey, thanks