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hello everyone, it's just me standing up here reciting poetry trust is an issue for me another boring story but tell me: is there anybody out there that trusted someone so much? that you were two, turned into one, tied together by trust? and they would never betray any of the things that you say every secret they would keep it they would never stray away from your mind they would never try to confine every single thought that you ever had inside you would do the same you,d protect the other's name and when their life was at stake you'd put your own on the plate and tell Satan to wait so that you could both escape you went to hell and back together you were the best of friends forever and every single conversation that you ever had since then started with the word "remember" you had a lot of adventures but when it all ended you wanted to blow a house up cuz it turns out they pretended people like that should die disappear off of the earth they are aliens to our kind a problem at the birth cuz if you manipulate people just to get what you want then i promise you, it'll come back and bite before long it's happened to me a couple times people mess with my mind they think they're funny think they're cunning but that's where i draw the line yeah there's some lessons in life that you learn while you're alive never trust nobody i don't even trust my self will I fall short? like mom and dad and who else? my biological parents yeah, they were rotten and low boom! i was born, then my dad wanted to go my mom said "wait" dad said "to late"and then he starts for the door my mom grabs his arm and he shoves her to the floor he says "I'm sorry Loraine i can't stay here anymore I guess it's time for me to cross back over the border" then the traitor runs, leaving the three of us alone I swear to god when that man dies i'll blow up his gravestone cuz he lied but i know he's not the only one nowadays people just do it for fun I know plenty of people that say "I ain't like that" just from experience i can never be sure of that so pick your friends carefully have relationships sparingly cuz life is full of scares, lies, drama, tears, and twists looking at it now, huh, ain't life a bitch? cuz when your living your life and every thing is right all of a sudden your in a tunnel and you can't see the light caught up in the darkness and utter betrayal you see? now it starts to sound like a fairy tale now you sit in the dark and wait for somebody to help and when nobody comes you realize it's yourself that is alone in the end you are your only friend cuz when there is no body to fight you always win

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I'm changing right before you're eyes, i might need to improvise I may fall down a couple times but determinations in my eyes i'm changing my behavior i'm becoming my own savior if you can only trust me from my quest i'll never waver when i'm done with my journey you will see me differently people see me as an egotist just one more name on that long list you say that i'm too late and out of range motherf*cker stand here and watch me change when i walk my chains sway i'm gonna f*cking walk away get the hell out of this bitch how do i walk just like this 1 step, 2 step, 3 step,4 ill walk and walk and look back no more I've done shit i cant deny people always ask me why andrew, did you want to die? i say yes cuz i wont lie and every single time i try to forget it just reminds me about all of those times that i wasn't doing fine but the past is the past, so just move on you can talk about my past when i'm dead and gone but for now live for today i'm never going back, living for today forgetting about the past as i walk ill stop and stare i know if i could go anywhere id go to New York, Boston, Chicago find a place to put on a rap show these bitches and these hoes the only thing they knows is that being fake is the only way to go all this shit about my past, i don't give a crap you can go f*ck yourself if you wanna think like that what iv done ,its behind me what i've said, its a memory yet people think its o.k. to get up in my face andrew you little faggot! how could you let this happen? how does it fell to be on my own? to be gone and away from home? That's none of your biz you mofo now leave before i sock yo shut up before i knock yo ass down to the ground below haters gotta stop living in the past the present is becoming the present too fast you know one day we are all gonna die, on your deathbed looking up, what did i do with my life? talking to god, i'm sorry i'm a hater, i was nothing but a liar and a player hating was my life and my life was full of hating god be like look ,sorry for what i'm saying i'm sending you to hell ill throw you down a well oh what we were just standing and he just kinda fell should we get him? no he'll be o.k. just keep quiet and walk away I'm changing right before you're eyes, i might need to improvise I may fall down a couple times but determinations in my eyes i'm changing my behavior i'm becoming my own savior if you can only trust me from my quest i'll never waver when i'm done with my journey you will see me differently people see me as an egotist just one more name on that long list you say that im too late and out of range motherf*cker stand here and watch me change ill leave you to die cuz you'd leave me get rid of compassion it'll only hurt me you think that people care about love you nigga get me out this fantasy is killing me the real world is what i need people don't take me seriously when i'm talking they don't trust me man its shocking all these pills and meds are blocking all the thoughts that i'm concocting but i know where i am walking out the door turn around turn the key the only sound you'll hear is me walking out and i wont look back if i look back it only proves that i miss my past but i don't want it anymore so i'm gonna slam the door i'm walking away far far away living for today that's what your gonna hear me say forget about the past the past is the past the the only thing i'm passing is the thing that i'm retracting i'm sure with a little acting they'll forget and stop asking i'm reeling in these memories i've picked up over centuries 6 feet deep ill bury em so i don't have to carry em all these words around my head sorry if i forget, but it was my papa who said i can change if i really care that set it for me then and there i cant change my past, itll haunt me forever i can either run or learn will i run?never So stop talking about things that nobody even cares about you still might not understand, so i'm gonna lay it out i'm gonna wake up wash off this makeup put on a mask and focus on my task I'm changing right before you're eyes, i might need to improvise I may fall down a couple times but determinations in my eyes i'm changing my behavior i'm becoming my own savior if you can only trust me from my quest i'll never waver when i'm done with my journey you will see me differently people see me as an egotist just one more name on that long list you say that i'm too late and out of range motherf*cker stand here and watch me change i'm changing for the people and the life that i once had if i could do it over i would not be such a fag looking at the man in the mirror i do not like what i'm seeing i hate the guy that i've become that's what i'm decreeing look i know i f*cked up i'm trying to make it better i'm trying to make amends that's why i'm writing this letter I'm abandoning my past i ain't ever going back so you better shut your trap or prepare to get bashed i said i'm changing my behavior but sometimes i cant control my temper that's why i went to north range wasting peoples time cuz a few weeks later i was all good and fine but they did not believe me so i still go to therapy and you know what that's fine by me cuz i get to hang with my homies even when i was a newbie it felt like they already knew me as soon as i walked through that door i didn't feel alone no more

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