No time lyrics

[Colllins Osama]

Hey i maybe thought that some of you guys could help me improving my writing skill. So thats why I put my whole song lyric in this message:

 

{Verse 1}
1.) I think so many people just talk shit/
2.) So i put them on my f*cking hitlist/
3.) It's the reason i got no time for chilling/
4.) So i get bored and just start with killing/
5.)Starting spilling blood like i am itachi/
6.) Wanted to drive around in a pink caddy/
7.)I will slaughter u all because i can/
8.)Even witout having one single /
9.)I have a lot of things planed for the bitch u call mom/~
10.) I don't know where this bar just came from/
11.) But i know the dudes' mom i meant is mad now/
12.) I am pretty sure he thinks that i am scared somehow/
13.) So i just asume that he is a big coward/
14.) But please don't underestimate my power/
15.) Otherwise it won't be fun for you if we encounter/
16.) I have a lot of reason to catch all of these snakes/
17.) But it's so important to not even let one of them escape

[Hook]
1.) I got no time for this shit 
2.) But You just wanna shine a little bit 
3.) But Your whole f*cking life is a skit
4.) And Like I said i got no f*cking time for this shit

5.) I got no time for this shit 
6.) But You just wanna shine a little bit 
7.) But Your whole f*cking life is a skit
8.) And Like I said i got no f*cking time for this shit

{Verse 2}
1.) Everybody just  started to hate  me/
2.) But I'll kill em  bitch I'm on a killing spree/
3.) Cause gathering all this hate helps me awake /
4.) The mangekyou sharingan with which i see your fate/
5.) In which you will lose all of your mates/
6.) Afterwards you will be calling me lord and savior/
7.) Hope i won't be marked as a traitor/
8.)Otherwise you will be all in danger/
9.) But i don't care cause I am a slayer/
10.) Always slaying every single one of them masturbator/
11.) But maybe instead of slaying them try to talk/
12.) But Bitch I alreday tried it didn't worked well/
13.) Cause am a motherf*cking ghoul so you better move some steps back/~
14.) Cause your attempts to ruin my reputation are so f*cking whack/~
15.) But there is not much time to end this like the bitch you are/
16.) So i will  just end it with the next track which isn't away that far/

[Hook]
1.)I got no time for this shit 
2.)But You just wanna shine a little bit 
3.)But Your whole f*cking life is a skit
4.)And Like I said i got no f*cking time for this shit

5.)I got no time for this shit 
6.)But You just wanna shine a little bit 
7.)But Your whole f*cking life is a skit
8.)And Like I said i got no f*cking time for this shit
 

I hope you could help me out cause its my first time writing rap lyrics and i don't know if they are okay at least.

Would apreciate it.

Thanks

[abacusmc]

5 hours ago, Colllins Osama said:

Hey i maybe thought that some of you guys could help me improving my writing skill. So thats why I put my whole song lyric in this message:

 

{Verse 1}
1.) I think so many people just talk shit/
2.) So i put them on my f*cking hitlist/
3.) It's the reason i got no time for chilling/
4.) So i get bored and just start with killing/
5.)Starting spilling blood like i am itachi/
6.) Wanted to drive around in a pink caddy/
7.)I will slaughter u all because i can/
8.)Even witout having one single /
9.)I have a lot of things planed for the bitch u call mom/~
10.) I don't know where this bar just came from/
11.) But i know the dudes' mom i meant is mad now/
12.) I am pretty sure he thinks that i am scared somehow/
13.) So i just asume that he is a big coward/
14.) But please don't underestimate my power/
15.) Otherwise it won't be fun for you if we encounter/
16.) I have a lot of reason to catch all of these snakes/
17.) But it's so important to not even let one of them escape

 

 

One quick note with the first verse, you shouldn't have 17 lines, any beat is going to have a pattern which means you should always write in multiples of 4 (usually 16 for a verse).

[abacusmc]

Also, I have trouble commenting on lyrics generally, as everyone writes in their own way, you should just try recording it and see how it sounds!