Tension - Pop song I made!

[John Lund]

Here's a song I just finished! Wanted to see what you think It's called Tension

It's about a psychopath girl that no one can resist.

 

Hope you enjoy!

[MikeRobinson]

Definitely "a good pop song."  I could feel it in the first four measures.  Very clean, very bright.

 

Now – what I'd look for now is "a truly-melodic B-Part."  Something that takes us briefly out of "what you've got here" before returning us solidly to it.  I say, "truly melodic," because maybe it takes us both to a change of texture and maybe a change of key.  Maybe it dances around "2 and 4" in contrast to the "1 and 3" which clearly drives most of the song so-far.

[John Lund]

18 hours ago, MikeRobinson said:

Definitely "a good pop song."  I could feel it in the first four measures.  Very clean, very bright.

 

Now – what I'd look for now is "a truly-melodic B-Part."  Something that takes us briefly out of "what you've got here" before returning us solidly to it.  I say, "truly melodic," because maybe it takes us both to a change of texture and maybe a change of key.  Maybe it dances around "2 and 4" in contrast to the "1 and 3" which clearly drives most of the song so-far.

I played around with the idea of doing something along those lines, but wasn't really happy with anything I came up with. Thanks for the feedback though!