What do you think of my song?

[Isaiah Juarez]

Give me feedback on my song. 

 

https://soundcloud.app.goo.gl/6ze9J

 

Lyrics:

 

(Chorus)

 

Mind frame (x2)

 

Thought i was solid before my time came

I looked around, who was there to blame? 

I had to wake up to face my own shame 

 

Time frame (x2) 

 

Life with no change is one lived in vain 

To see my flaws, i had alot to gain 

Knew after this, i could neva be tha same

 

(Verse 1)

 

Thought my exes cheated, i had twined pains 

I’m paranoid, my head was playin mind games 

 

Funny i cheated before, ignorance is bliss 

Had affairs with married women, some had kids 

Woke up from it all like how did it come to this? 

 

David cheated with bathsheba, his mistress 

Had her man, Uriah, killed in stiffness

Broke the code of honor, God was a witness

Didn’t know his son was next on the hitlist 

 

Pride had me standin tall, treated cheaters like cancers 

Things turned different when i broke my own standards 

 

Price paid! (x2) 

What i’d give to fix the damage vice made! 

 

It’s amazin what women can do to you truly 

I wonder if their men will get revenge n shoot me 

 

Old me says it’s what i get for bein perverse  

New me says pain is what i don’t deserve 

 

(Chorus repeat)

Time frame (x2)

 

Will i stay stuck in the past, hung by a chain? 

If i’m married, can i keep lightin the flame? 

I just pray it won’t cause my heart strain 

 

(Verse 2) 

 

Mind frame! x2 

 

I got backstabbed by my main mane! 

He tried to date my ex when we were in pain!

Neva thought he would speak ill of my name!

 

Paranoia had me hangin by a thread!

Made me feel like my girl would end up dead!

Lost confidence with the voices in my head!

 

Pride had me thinkin women owed me debts 

N if they didn’t, i’d think of them less! 

 

I looked at my past for answers i was after!

On the key to relationships i had to master! 

I was desperate, couldn’t keep livin selfish

Will i be a slave to this, forever helpless?

 

Hooked on women, feel like i’m on a drug!

Hard to find yourself if you grew up with no luv!

 

Near a mental breakdown, can’t tell what’s real or fake 

Questionin loyalties, dunno how much i can take!

[iv4q9]

Decent track, but you could definitely use help with the vocal engineering. The auto-tune sounds not great, and even could just use better EQ.  Hit me up on DM if you want more help

[goosefart]

This beat is nice however what @iv4q9 mentioned is absolutely correct. By reading your lyrics, looks like your ex did you dirty. Stay up man. There are Billions out in the ocean and work on yourself mentally and physically and you will fine a dime piece or they will find you if you are really determined. 

[Isaiah Juarez]

1 hour ago, iv4q9 said:

Decent track, but you could definitely use help with the vocal engineering. The auto-tune sounds not great, and even could just use better EQ.  Hit me up on DM if you want more help

Absolutely, I need alot of work with mixing. I used graillon and FL studio to mix. I didn't adjust the auto tune properly. 

[Peggy]

Hi Isaiah,

 

The lyrics are emotive but hard to follow with the song because of the auto-tune, as mentioned above.  It would be good to get that worked out and let us hear it again.  

 

Peggy