Tekneek

dope man. like the flow if like to hear it over a beat. maybe a little more meaningful rhymes but this is just a freestyle so I get it your just messin around showcasing the lyricism

listen up this is a masterpiece I'm stitching a picture of rap masterfully now all listeners thinking Its just another amateur just in a bad mood cause your ass still hurts I won't mention from what but I will say it's not of a problem to any straight mans butt for real, what? nothin I didn't say that chill just get comfy sit back n spectate this shit my lyrics a mix of Pepper spray in a drinking cup makin all of your senses burn whenever I spit some droppin ur favourite rappers like Its laughable like I'm packin a handful of mosquito spray n bug zappers to stop em if competition comes up I drop the zappers gladly pull out my handy dandy notebook n grab a bar give em clue of how to rap hard like me I do it better than y'all compre- hend it don't matter u can't follow these lyrics I'm like a shakspeare on these beats

ya I focused a lot on the flow and not south the ryhmin. the way I flow it it it seems to rhyme for me but I see what u mean. appreciate the response

if you didn't get it which I understand there are holes in the story and what not it's about an younger brother who had dreams of becoming a famous rapper when his older brother stole the mic and the spotlight from him. "anger grew and resentment tortured and forced him to take action" meaning the jealousy and what not drove him to kill his brother, on the way to drop off his brothers corpse he gets pulled over and arrested and he chooses to go to a mental institute. once he is thinking clearly again he is left with memories of what he's done and the everlasting hole in his life that his brother previously filled. as I say in the last verse, " a lesson is there, perspective is all but clear" which I intend to mean there are lessons to be learnt, all depending upon the perspective of the reader/listener

Just started rhyming so this is me just messin around with a story in mind. the bars really go in and out of the beat so it might be hard to follow without it but oh well let me know what you think dear journal, September seventeeth this marks the second record Jordan ever recorded it too marks the kick start of continuos disappointment for me so tonight I'm voice it and scream cause I I have so much hate for the way you gave me no choice, dude you left me to bath in water that you had boiled you became the favorite boy, years later it's more of the same torn between depression vengeance and anger you see who's dream was it to be able scribble down rhymes and hide in their loosleaf it was mine but you bein you two up'd me, why after all that we been through did you choose to steal what I aspired you hit cruise n drive never looked at the rear view you hypnotized our family but I see through it my feelings blew up you coulda defused it you choose to keep losin your own brotherhood to music it's over I'm done throwin insults I'm close to snappin this raps mourning the fact that you threw away what we had Jordan I stand here closin the chapter of you closure's the path that I choose I love you but there's somethin I have to do Jordan, my brother, known to others as famous all I know is my brother left me and now I hate him stolen dreams hole in my feelings same crap cry myself to sleep but tonight I'm comin for payback Jordan, my brother, known to others as famous all I know is my brother left me and now I hate him stolen dreams hole in my feelings same crap cry myself to sleep but tonight I'm coming for payback dear journal it's now September 18th this is the day figured out how I get I closure see i woke up last night screaming and shit dream was a gift an now I see what just might be a great plan they say lightning don't strike twice but chance it could but before I let that happen I'm makin sure your life is taken for good so I stake out your party get you alone then I watch as I spike your boozes hey Jordan ya woozy? Jordan ya feeling loosy goosy more than you should be could be all that boozy an the 2 packs of the roofies you consumed with you begin to slip wobble n fall I load the clip up,cock it pull the trigger an draw blood who'd a figured this all would be resolved with a simple shot homicide in a party it's getting late throw you in shotgun start drivin onwards get on the freeway all of this almost over say cheese for the camera snap an the flash goes off jeez damn we so look good together too bad the police on our ass I blast Stan by eminem the last track I need to hear ever again the six minutes is done I pull over and slowly stop watch as the cops mozy on over throw me hand cuffs you might think this is sad but only part of the plan cause the aftermath of the matter was bound to catch up to me an I'd be sad nuff to dwell with judgement cloudy id plan to hack up my wrists myself just couldnt wouldn't live with what I'done so instead of that I choose to get help waste my days In a mental institute stead of cell, so as the seconds turn to minutes hours to days mind refreshes hurt diminishes with the rage clouds have lifted today so how can I still feel rain my hate for Jordan is gone now I'm left with memories as this unfolds the plot thickens n triggers in depth mourning especially with this clear thought process of my emotions I loved Jordan, I loved what he was personality through the roof the fans absorbed what he was too everlasting who's who game is what I ended up playin wishin I was him on the mic moving my fans from the stage why the f*ck do like him then boom realization came we ain't the same dude, family means two people related deflated I knew I'd never be labeled great like my brother anger grew n resentment tortured an forced me to take action haunted after with thoughts blacker then ash recourse over n over they play back to my past so I lay this last rap verse to the track revert back to verse one as I rap up what's done a smoking gun the smokes fun but the bullet that's fired creates a wave I learned my lesson I deserve everything in the wake Jordan my brother I'm sorry I acted fast regret haunts me daily with all this collateral damage nightmarish dream hearing my feelings all day why didn't I just steer off the exit like all y'all say Jordan my brother I'm sorry I acted fast regret haunts me daily with all this collateral damage nightmarish dream hearing my feelings all day why didn't I just steer off the exit hey Stan smart play as you guys listen n try to think of the finish for this song the climax you figure there's gotta be one introverted conclusion or sad lesson that he learned the lessons there perspective is all but clear this story's got no happy endin or sad one just a lonely brother remorseful of his every action so know before you act fast there's repercussions cause the unknown unknowns are what seem to catch up to ya

if you didn't get it which I understand there are holes in the story and what not it's about an younger brother who had dreams of becoming a famous rapper when his older brother stole the mic and the spotlight from him. "anger grew and resentment tortured and forced him to take action" meaning the jealousy and what not drove him to kill his brother, on the way to drop off his brothers corpse he gets pulled over and arrested and he chooses to go to a mental institute. once he is thinking clearly again he is left with memories of what he's done and the everlasting hole in his life that his brother previously filled. as I say in the last verse, " a lesson is there, perspective is all but clear" which I intend to mean there are lessons to be learnt, all depending upon the perspective of the reader/listener

Just started rhyming so this is me just messin around with a story in mind. the bars really go in and out of the beat so it might be hard to follow without it but oh well let me know what you think dear journal, September seventeeth this marks the second record Jordan ever recorded it too marks the kick start of continuos disappointment for me so tonight I'm voice it and scream cause I I have so much hate for the way you gave me no choice, dude you left me to bath in water that you had boiled you became the favorite boy, years later it's more of the same torn between depression vengeance and anger you see who's dream was it to be able scribble down rhymes and hide in their loosleaf it was mine but you bein you two up'd me, why after all that we been through did you choose to steal what I aspired you hit cruise n drive never looked at the rear view you hypnotized our family but I see through it my feelings blew up you coulda defused it you choose to keep losin your own brotherhood to music it's over I'm done throwin insults I'm close to snappin this raps mourning the fact that you threw away what we had Jordan I stand here closin the chapter of you closure's the path that I choose I love you but there's somethin I have to do Jordan, my brother, known to others as famous all I know is my brother left me and now I hate him stolen dreams hole in my feelings same crap cry myself to sleep but tonight I'm comin for payback Jordan, my brother, known to others as famous all I know is my brother left me and now I hate him stolen dreams hole in my feelings same crap cry myself to sleep but tonight I'm coming for payback dear journal it's now September 18th this is the day figured out how I get I closure see i woke up last night screaming and shit dream was a gift an now I see what just might be a great plan they say lightning don't strike twice but chance it could but before I let that happen I'm makin sure your life is taken for good so I stake out your party get you alone then I watch as I spike your boozes hey Jordan ya woozy? Jordan ya feeling loosy goosy more than you should be could be all that boozy an the 2 packs of the roofies you consumed with you begin to slip wobble n fall I load the clip up,cock it pull the trigger an draw blood who'd a figured this all would be resolved with a simple shot homicide in a party it's getting late throw you in shotgun start drivin onwards get on the freeway all of this almost over say cheese for the camera snap an the flash goes off jeez damn we so look good together too bad the police on our ass I blast Stan by eminem the last track I need to hear ever again the six minutes is done I pull over and slowly stop watch as the cops mozy on over throw me hand cuffs you might think this is sad but only part of the plan cause the aftermath of the matter was bound to catch up to me an I'd be sad nuff to dwell with judgement cloudy id plan to hack up my wrists myself just couldnt wouldn't live with what I'done so instead of that I choose to get help waste my days In a mental institute stead of cell, so as the seconds turn to minutes hours to days mind refreshes hurt diminishes with the rage clouds have lifted today so how can I still feel rain my hate for Jordan is gone now I'm left with memories as this unfolds the plot thickens n triggers in depth mourning especially with this clear thought process of my emotions I loved Jordan, I loved what he was personality through the roof the fans absorbed what he was too everlasting who's who game is what I ended up playin wishin I was him on the mic moving my fans from the stage why the f*ck do like him then boom realization came we ain't the same dude, family means two people related deflated I knew I'd never be labeled great like my brother anger grew n resentment tortured an forced me to take action haunted after with thoughts blacker then ash recourse over n over they play back to my past so I lay this last rap verse to the track revert back to verse one as I rap up what's done a smoking gun the smokes fun but the bullet that's fired creates a wave I learned my lesson I deserve everything in the wake Jordan my brother I'm sorry I acted fast regret haunts me daily with all this collateral damage nightmarish dream hearing my feelings all day why didn't I just steer off the exit like all y'all say Jordan my brother I'm sorry I acted fast regret haunts me daily with all this collateral damage nightmarish dream hearing my feelings all day why didn't I just steer off the exit hey Stan smart play as you guys listen n try to think of the finish for this song the climax you figure there's gotta be one introverted conclusion or sad lesson that he learned the lessons there perspective is all but clear this story's got no happy endin or sad one just a lonely brother remorseful of his every action so know before you act fast there's repercussions cause the unknown unknowns are what seem to catch up to ya