m1k3

I like this a lot. In my opinion, you're very talented. Most rappers that use a high amount of multisyllable rhymes have a lot of filler. All of your's have substance and a point. This is impressive work and I realize the effort that goes into lyrics like that.

I like that song. Overall, your recreation isn't bad, but I would've enjoyed it more if it rhymed more to make it flow smoother.

I enjoyed it too. I also think what omenrama posted would help the writer and the audience.

I liked your ( Rebel's ) second verse the most. I think the entire work got better as it progressed. I also agree with MrDoubleMan. This would definitely improve the flow of the rhyme.

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