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Remote garage opener push button with receiver switch you just hide inside. I bought them for my gate opener project. Cheap. I can send you the pair bu usps. Message me if you want it. Of course you might lose the remote
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I’ve discovered that having to work is the drag not actually working. Once you actually pick a retirement day it’s not work anymore. I contract because I like to do the work but I could quit any day (and have on occasion) so it’s not bad at all. When I was mid career and my company had massive layouts that was the worst for me. I took a pay cut but never missed a pay check. With a family to support that would be the absolute worst. I don’t even claim to understand how that would feel.
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Welcome. I’m at the other end of the spectrum but think Cody and Patchez will get you where you want to go
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Verse 3 clears up any mystery. The words were vince’s being recalled v3 Twenty some odd men recalled Those words that Vince had spoken Someone pulled the jukebox box plug So everyone could hear She smiled and said No Thank You I think he’s learned his lesson None of you will ever do Left ringing in their ears Repeat chorus or progressive chorus? This time it needs to be progressive. They’re both outside and the men inside have been dismissed Chorus 2 Kathy you look pretty Those men all thought so too Your just what they were looking for All of them would do Anything you wanted They’d have done for you I’m so proud to take you home and Look awhile at you After it’s complete I sing it over and over. More often than not I think of something that will sound better or maybe just sing better Thanks for following if you did
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But we’re going to here them a couple more times The chorus here is Vince speaking to Kathy his wife sitting on a barstool obviously looking for a good time with any other man. Verse 2 gives the background and gets Vince out of the way so Kathy can pick up a man. The background story is known by all twenty some odd men who may have laughed engender they first heard it. Now they may be thinking Vince is giving them a green light. In a way he is. v2 Twenty some odd men watched Vince A man they’d known for ages They also knew the words he said That made his Kathy’s cry Shes not much pretty but she’ll do He’d told them at the barber’s Now as he left he saw their stares The lust in every eye Repeat Chorus or progressive chorus? This could be one or more of the men repeating what Vince had said. If we’re using Lucille’s sequence, it could be the men recalling what he’d said Verse 3 will tell the story—hopefully a more satisfying ending than the one in Lucille
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Verse 1. 8 lines. I have to get the wife in to a barstool. Have her noticed. Have her state her objective (with a look ) and have vince come over. I wanted to have somebody pull the plug to the juke box but only 8 lines. Have to do it in verse 2 v1 Twenty some odd men looked up The woman crossed the barroom She hadn’t been inside before But they all new her name NOTE You have to look ahead to the rhyming word at the end: game, same, blame could all easily fit so I move on. She needs to make sure they know she’s looking for a man—anyone but Vince i like the idea of starting with twenty some odd again. My alternative was to mention Vince by name. Here goes: Twenty some odd looks she gave The men inside the barroom Her eyes said come on if you dare Just one man played her game That sets me up for the chorus. We don’t really know that it’s Vince because he hasn’t been introduced. The words he speaks (the chorus) don’t completely clear up the mystery and are a little strange sounding if we don’t know they are already man and wife
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I hope I haven’t confused everyone. What I want to use out of Lucille is the story line. Not the notes and the sequence of da d da d das. I’ll still keep that consistent with WYMNC-WYNN as in the chorus That song had a first verse of 8 lines which followed the OPENING chorus “Thirty some odd years ago “The young man came to Memphis ”Asking about a rose that used ”To bloom inside his world” ”People never Took the time “To mind the young mans question “Until they heard him ask a ”Little green eyed girl” NOTICE how the verse is just beginning to answer the question you might have after listening to the chorus. It ends by slowing the tempo and introducing THE LITTLE GREEN EYED GIRL My first will do the same. It will bring Vince and the fixed up version of his wife to the same location. But unlike WYMNC I will follow the woman into the barroom LIKE LUCILLE does ive got that verse written and will post it next time. I’m wondering now if I should lead with the chorus. I think I could do that but it would reduce the drama of the first verse which will end with She hadn’t been inside before BUT THEY ALL NEW HER NAME
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Chorus labels: I’m not sure if it’s even significant. For me it prompted me to writr a chorus that could be used early and often. The story line is revealed in the chorus. For those who haven’t been keeping up with another nearby thread. The story chronologically starts with the not-so-handsome husband watching his wife walk by a barber shop Embarrassed that she’s not at looker’ he remarks”She’s not pretty but she would do. @MikeRobinson I am fictionalizing the story at this point. As you’ve pointed out the documented portion (preceding) might as well be considered fiction as well So months or years pass. The man resorts to spending time at bars. He rarely gets lucky. On one such night his wife walks in all made up and looking pretty good. He figures out its her after his heart has already started racing. He has an I’ve been a crappy husband moment and decides to make amends. With more class than most of us possess THE CHORUS occurs. She takes him home exhibiting more class than he has a right to expect. Three verses. V1: Description of him at the bar and her walking in V2: Return to the past at the barber shop. V3: she leaves the bar and picks up her old man. I KNOW. SOMETHING SIMILAR HAS BEEN DONE. just not as good as this is going to be
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To fully understand the chorus you would have to 1) be familiar with an earlier defunded post or 2) allow me to explain via my verses. The template for the verses will be You Picked a Fine Time to Leave Me Lucille NOW you’re all thinking Snaffu was right. THIS is no way to write lyrics. Yes it is It’s one way because lyrics will result. I had originally intended to use Lucille’s chorus as my chorus template. I think Lucille is a chorus-assisted lyric. You may only sing the chorus when you think of the song but the mental images you remember when the singer is in the motel room having second thought. ENOUGH FOR NOW. IF ANYONE READS FURTHER I’ll start on verse 1 and explain my thought process
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Definitions: chorus-led lyrics: The chorus is the message and is most likely all you remember about the song. Examples: Do You Want to Go to Heaven, Delta Dawn, What’s Your Mama’s Name Child. These may not even be the titles but that reinforces my definition. It’s all you remember chorus-assisted: The verses carry the story. The chorus may provide some continuity or only be near the end much like an afterthought I think The Gambler is an example of a chorus assisted lyric. It’s chorus doesn’t permeate the whole song. It’s perhaps the catchiest part of the song. But only helps the story along progressive chorus and other chorus terminology is beyond the scope of my thread. @Patchez I accept your explanation. Whats Your Mama’s Name Child will be the template for my lyric My chorus: My you sure are pretty Nice to meet you too I know what you’re looking for Doubt that I will do I’ll be on the outside When your looking’s through I’d be proud to take you home If you think I’ll do
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enough to satisfy me
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I got my method autocorrected by oldies radio this morning. I had been going to use a chorus-assisted template for lyric development. I doubt that my terminology meets Lord Snafficogagus’ approval but that doesn’t matter at all I worry more about @Cody blessing right now. Instead I heard one of my old favorites that had chorus-led Lyric. Since this a song writing forum I’ll explain what I mean. Next post. Busy guy
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@john hectic at my house. 3 things going on 1- this song development thread 2- another separate song that’s taking a lot of time. 3 - support I’m geting from cody and patchez on a thread called reciprocal mentoring. 4- (can I not count- actually this one is FINISHED for me) a thread of mine where snaffu smash mouthed my lyrics and led me to ignore him. so glad to have @john on board. His opinions are always treasured by me
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So my next step is to get my story down to the melody in my head. It’s easier for me if I pick a melody I really like because it’s (gentle) in my mind and the hit songs lyrics are a basic template I can hang my own words on. I would probably use YouTube to get the lyrics and write them down on a piece of paper. For CR reasons I will just post the na n nas here with some notations
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