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Danka last won the day on July 7 2012

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  1. Danka

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    Alex I don’t know if you aware of that, you nearly described nearly 5 stages of grief in peoples’ life. The emotional suffering we feel after a loss of a person or some other kind of disappointment. I hope that give you some help when you will write your music “Denial (this isn't happening to me!) Anger (why is this happening to me?) Bargaining (I promise I'll be a better person if...) Depression, sadness may remain underneath. (I don't care anymore) Acceptance or “stability” (I'm ready for whatever comes)” Danka
  2. JD, it's better if you critique our work earlier rather than later because I lost count how many times I changed my lyrics, lol. Better do your work first though. Cheers, Danka
  3. JD, I worked hard on these lyrics to get them right and to get smooth with the melody. Let me know if something has to be fixed or just give me your opinion. Thanks Danka Without engagement I see the world talking and laughing I feel my world is slowly crashing I’m sitting here all alone I see that my life has no meaning The tomorrow for us is gone I won’t be with you Bridge: I bought you the ring to state my love Our engagement turned to dust Chorus: I won’t love again I don’t want this pain Why did you betray me, my heart is broken I don’t want to live Life is full of grief It’s hard to love and leave /or this love is killing me I saw you both, kissing and cuddling Me and my love for you meant nothing You were there selling me cheap I just left the room without asking Though my love for you is still deep I chose to let go Bridge: I bought you the ring to state my love Our engagement turned to dust Chorus: I won’t love again I don’t want this pain Why did you betray me, my heart is broken I don’t want to live Life is full of grief It’s hard to love and leave /or this love is killing me Middle Always I thought was there The Magical land of love You were the only one With whom I wished to share The great wonder of life But I decided to walk away From you and your lies But you always will be my love My love of yesterday Danuta Gal ©
  4. JD, thanks for your directions and help. I am still working on it and in a few days I will post them.
  5. JD, I worked on version 1 of your melody like you said. It was fun. I just want to improve my writing and it is a good opportunity for me to work with a melody which I never done before. I am glad that you shared your tune with us and people like me can practice with it. Danka My love is far away Feel it touch me Whisper cute words How sweet can love be? We’re close like love birds Promise me this Move in with me for good Seal our love with a kiss Rise: I will go with you if I could No, nobody knows how I feel Chorus: My love is far away My love is distant Why don’t you come to me, I feel so lonely I just want to Just be close to Close, close to you Sunrise is now Breakfast for two I want more time, but how To spend more time with you You travel by plane I’ll visit you, I would Wish to see you again Rise: I will go with you if I could No, nobody knows how I feel Chorus: My love is far away My love is distant Why don’t you come to me, I feel so lonely I just want to Just be close to Close, close to you Danuta Gal ©
  6. Dee thank you for the comment JD don’t give up on me yet I think I could deliver these are my first attempts. I had changed the title. JD, any direction from you will be great. Thanks Danka Without engagement Why is it hurting so much… I see the world talking and laughing I feel my world is slowly crashing I’m sitting here all alone I’m on the edge of the unknown I hold the ring you will never wear it You had the affair Rise: Tell me if you loved me, in any case Our engagement won’t take place Chorus: I won’t love again The agony of pain Stays inside my heart, my heart is broken I‘m beaten man You had torn apart The love in my heart I‘d caught you on lying and cheating I feel so sad my heart is weeping You were selling me cheap I love you truly and deeply I saw your antics and I knew I wouldn’t stay with you Rise: Tell me if you loved me, in any case Our engagement won’t take place Chorus: I won’t love again The agony of pain Stays inside my heart, my heart is broken I‘m beaten man You had torn apart The love in my heart
  7. JD, thanks for your reply I followed your instructions. I do agree with you, the previous chorus was too cocky so I changed it and I like it now. I changed and replaced some words and it should sound better now and the story is clearer. It is hard to see my own mistakes so I’d be happy if you point them out.. JD,I don’t know much about a middle 8 can you explain is it same melody or does it vary.Is the middle eight the same as the bridge? Thanks I AM STILL WORKING ON THEM AND NEW CHORUS {not happy about this lyrics} Danka My Final Call Life must go on…. I see the world talking and laughing I feel my world is slowly crashing I am sitting on my own I feel down, my heart sinks like a stone Too soon I had bought you that ring I know you had a fling Rise: I don’t want to talk to you at all No engagement, it’s my final call Chorus: I don’t want your tears I don’t want your “why’s” I know that you don’t love me, as it appears You fed me with lies I don’t want your tears Time to say goodbye I‘ve seen you both kissing and dining I thought for while about dying You were selling me cheap My love for you was true and deep You should’ve handed back my key No more “you and me” Rise: I don’t want to talk to you at all No engagement, it’s my final call Chorus: I don’t want your tears I don’t want your “why’s I know that you don’t love me, as it appears You fed me with lies I don’t want your tears Time to say goodbye
  8. JD, that’s me again, it is winter in Australia so the days are short so i spend more time at home.I took a time to listen to the words you were signing and this time I think I did it right. Thanks for showing me in the right direction for the writing to the melody. I hope you like it. I really value your opinion and criticism. P.S It was a bit like brain exercise ha ha My Final Call I see the world is talking and laughing I feel my world is gradually crashing I am sitting on my own You told me that was just a fling Your heart has become a stone I bought you the ring Bridge I don’t want to talk to you at all No engagement, it’s my final call Chorus: I already knew I don’t give a damn I just want you to go I said my adieu I already knew I don’t give a damn And to hell with you I have seen you both kissing and dining I felt like my world started dying You were selling me cheap You should have given back my key My love for you was growing deep You took that from me Bridge I don’t want to talk to you at all No engagement, it’s my final call Chorus: I already knew I don’t give a damn I just want you to go I said my adieu I already knew I don’t give a damn And to hell with you Danuta Gal © 23/6/11
  9. JD, today I had a bit of time so I listened to the melody and the tune drew me in. I loved it sooooo much that for whole day it had stayed in my mind and I couldn’t resist putting some lyrics in it . What you reckon?. Danka Since you’d left me I still love you so.... The light in the tunnel is dimming You‘re not here, really gone I missed you, life goes on Every night my heart is bleeding Keeps me awake till the crack of dawn {or till the dawn} You’ve vanished for good I would bring you back if I could I don’t believe that you’re gone Chorus: My heart cries for you Don’t you see My mind is full of you Since you’d left me I’ll never be the same I’ll never be If you don’t come, come back To me My love for you is still burning I’m not yet able to let it go It’s hard to accept and to know Not to see you again, it’s hurting It’s not an illusion of love, How to extinguish the flame Every day I am calling your name You are all that I can think of Chorus: My heart cries for you Don’t you see My mind is full of you Since you’d left me I’ll never be the same I’ll never be If you don’t come, come back To me Danuta Gal © 23/6/11
  10. Hello JD, the best is to have tea with some brandy in it for the cold. I hope that you will feel better in few days Thanks for adding a melody to those lyrics. I like them, even though you had sick throat. I changed what you had suggested with the red line and I also put a new verse {v4} in, crossed fingers that this will suit the tune. Thanks Danka From other sides of the world you came here with one dream to represent your country athletes of the Olympic team V2 The Olympic torch is alight The flame gives warmth to your heart You are ready and can’t wait For the games to take part Bridge: You’ve a chance to write your own story Step into victory and live in glory Chorus: Believe You are fast You are tough You’re good enough Believe You are strong Go straight through The winner is in you V3 Your dream is to be on top To give it all is what you’ve got Everyone believes in you So today, give your best shot V4 Your Inner Warrior has the strength Don't fear your contender You came here after your dream In the battle you won't surrender V4 Bridge: You’ve a chance to write you own story Step into victory and live in glory V5 as above
  11. JD, theres is no pressure on you, from me.You don't need to, only if you wish to do it.
  12. JD, I try to sing but I'm not happy with the way my voice sounds. You have a wonderful voice, unlike some people (me). I tried many times and I thought it was terrible.
  13. Dee my voice is not Hallelujah my voice sounds like Amen Dee yesterday I was singing and recorded my voice but its not even close to uplifting. It sounded like very sad funeral. Thanks but better I leave this for someone else .Cheers.
  14. Dee,I really admire you for singing your lyrics. I think the melody could work. A big applause. P.S I won’t even try to sing my lyrics us I am not the melodic type and not brave enough as you.
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