Challenge 29- Love Is A Bridge

[ames1212]

Love is a bridge- CC 12/26/2010

Written by: Amy Abernathy

You see that child without food to eat,

You walk on by, you walk on by.

You’re too caught up in your own little world,

To see that kid is in need.

A little time and a tender heart,

Could give that child a brand new start.

You can touch someone’s heart,

With just a little love.

There are so many hungry mouths to feed.

You can make a difference with just one, you see.

Because……

Love is a bridge, Love is a bridge, love is a bridge

To a heart. Love is a highway to a brand new start.

Love is a bridge that connects our minds,

Love is patient, love is kind.

A lady is sad because her husband is gone:

He fought that cancer for oh so long.

She needs someone to show they care,

Someone to talk to, and just be there.

You can say it’s much too much,

Or you can reach and show her love.

A helping hand is sent from up above.

Because……

Love is a bridge, Love is a bridge, love is a bridge

To a heart. Love is a highway to a brand new start.

Love is a bridge that connects our minds,

Love is patient, love is kind.

A young family lost their home,

Hurricane came and everything’s gone.

They sit in a shelter wondering what to do.

Then people brought food and a little tenderness too.

We can help if we open our hearts:

We just got to do our part.

Show some love to someone today;

It might make you have a sunny day.

Because……

Love is a bridge, Love is a bridge, love is a bridge

To a heart. Love is a highway to a brand new start.

Love is a bridge that connects our minds,

Love is patient, love is kind.

The things you give, it all comes back,

It may give our heart what it lacks.

Take some time and tell them you care,

Open your eyes and be aware.

CC Amy Abernathy 2011

Gagirlames@hotmail.com

[jamestoffee]

Hi Amy,

 

Good start   You have a nice way of getting ideas across.

 

Suggestion: Consider reading Pat Pattison's book Writing Better Lyrics; specifically chapter 7 called "Travelogues"-verse continuity.

 

It talks about when the verses do not have a natural relationship and how verses are meant to develop, so the basic idea would be to focus on the story in one of these verses and develop it rather than starting up a new story in each verse.

 

Thanks for sharing.

 

James

[ames1212]

Hi Amy,

 

Good start   You have a nice way of getting ideas across.

 

Suggestion: Consider reading Pat Pattison's book Writing Better Lyrics; specifically chapter 7 called "Travelogues"-verse continuity.

 

It talks about when the verses do not have a natural relationship and how verses are meant to develop, so the basic idea would be to focus on the story in one of these verses and develop it rather than starting up a new story in each verse.

 

Thanks for sharing.

 

James

I actually am reading his book right now. I am working on the metophors and trying not to use the same worn out phrases and clichés now. Some of my favorite country songs do have tiny stories that the chorus ties together. Although I do see your point. it is a great book and thank you for the feedback and advice.

[goldylocks]

I completely disagree with James. Sorry James, but I like the way it tells a different story in each verse, that connects with the chorus Love's a bridge. An example is Eleanor Rigby.written by Beatles were great ones for doing it.

 

Eleanor Rigby picks up the rice in the church where a wedding has been, 
Lives in a dream 
Waits at the window, wearing the face that she keeps in a jar by the door 
Who is it for?  (connects with chorus)

 

All the lonely people 

Where do they all come from? 
All the lonely people 
Where do they all belong?

 

Father Mckenzie writing the words of a sermon that no one will hear 

No one comes near. 
Look at him working, darning his socks in the night when there's nobody there 
What does he care?

 

Very Nice lyric, and original! It has a meaningful message of helping one another

 

 

Edited March 2, 2014 by goldylocks

[jamestoffee]

>I actually am reading his book right now.

 

That's great.   He can explain the pros and cons much better than I can

 

>I am working on the metaphors and trying not to use the same worn out phrases and clichés now.

 

Another great book on metaphors worth checking out is Metaphors We Live By by Lakoff and Johnson. 

 

It's not a songwriting book but it helps to see the richness of metaphors and a bit of a weakness with Pat's presentation.  Pat seems to imply you can throw just about any two unrelated ideas together to make metaphors, but Metaphors We Live By shows quite a rational relationship in how metaphors come together.

 

>Some of my favorite country songs do have tiny stories that the chorus ties together.

 

Great! so you have an idea of the type of song style and target audience who will be familiar with that type of story telling/song structure.

 

 

 

>I completely disagree with James. Sorry James

 

LOL no worries

 

 

 

 

> I like the way it tells a different story in each verse, that connects with the chorus Love's a bridge

 

My concern for this would be charities are typically very focused on one aspect of humanitarian effort with a specific type of story they are telling to reach that need.  Not many, if any, charities would be reaching out to hungry street children, widows, and food shelters...but I have not done enough research to say this is always the case.  A church would probably come closest to being that kind of charity outreach.....but again, it's not a hard fast rule of lyric writing. 

 

 

 

 

>An example is Eleanor Rigby.written by Beatles were great ones for doing it.

 

That's a great example, but the difference to me is the character's lives are cohabiting in the same town/city, but are in some sense clueless to each other's existence and loneliness which adds to the meaning of the song; the irony being the bigger the city, the more lonely people can be.

 

 

 

As always, only suggestions

 

James

Edited March 2, 2014 by jamestoffee

[ames1212]

Hi Amy,

 

Good start   You have a nice way of getting ideas across.

 

Suggestion: Consider reading Pat Pattison's book Writing Better Lyrics; specifically chapter 7 called "Travelogues"-verse continuity.

 

It talks about when the verses do not have a natural relationship and how verses are meant to develop, so the basic idea would be to focus on the story in one of these verses and develop it rather than starting up a new story in each verse.

 

Thanks for sharing.

 

James

Thanks for the tip, I actually am reading that book.

[ames1212]

I completely disagree with James. Sorry James, but I like the way it tells a different story in each verse, that connects with the chorus Love's a bridge. An example is Eleanor Rigby.written by Beatles were great ones for doing it.

 

Eleanor Rigby picks up the rice in the church where a wedding has been, 

Lives in a dream 

Waits at the window, wearing the face that she keeps in a jar by the door 

Who is it for?  (connects with chorus)

 

All the lonely people 

Where do they all come from? 

All the lonely people 

Where do they all belong?

 

Father Mckenzie writing the words of a sermon that no one will hear 

No one comes near. 

Look at him working, darning his socks in the night when there's nobody there 

What does he care?

 

Very Nice lyric, and original! It has a meaningful message of helping one another

 

 

Thank you Goldy, Eleanor Rigby is a very good song. I think a lot of Charities help a lot of different people, so want to encompass everything The Salvation Army would cover.