Through The Garden

[omenrama]

This is a quick sketch up of an idea. It's really just me getting in some practice. Maybe someone can help me visualize the rhythm/delivery/pauses/stresses etc. I am going to try and do it but I really need help with this. I think recording just the verse and posting it here would help you to help me. The subject is (very loosely) about : convincing one of an idea through rhetoric.

 

Through The Garden

 

As I show you,

Through the garden.

You stay (short pause) blind to the roses.

Knew the baths and fount of marble

Naught the mirror-self in the potion.

Symposia through liana vines

Whispers onto the arbor

Bottles into the harbor

Marvel here at the martyr

Latticework thorns a colonnade

Shade as we motion forward

Down to the theater's stage.

East where the hedges raise

Near evening to be reborn

From a maze.

Edited June 26, 2014 by omenrama

[tomcollins]

just to let you know , you can only post your lyric to one board , cool ??

[omenrama]

Yeah, sorry about that