Lisa, I really love this colorful creative song, but these lines seem awkward compared to the rest of your lyrics. Especially, To tell you the truth, it doesn't seem to fit with lyrics that flow with romance, it detracts from them, sounds like the beginning of an announcement. Of course that's only my opinion.
To tell you the truth, my whole life has been
Spent looking through a blue and green kaleidoscope.
I have a suggestion below, please don't be offended. Keep or sweep. I'm just trying to help, Other than that a Joni Mitchell type song for sure. Beautifully written!
I have spent my whole life in a maze of dreams
Looking through a blue and green kaleidoscope
Or
My whole life I've been in a maze of dreams
Looking through a blue and green kaleidoscope
Goldy
Thanks, for the lovely review on Psalm 91. I appreciate your time and your comments.
I told Skin about the free song writing course on July19, I thought I would give you the same link.
In that case, you owe it to yorself to sign up for the FREE Pat Pattison's Songwriting Class:Introduction to Songwriting at Coursera.org and it starts July 19th. (and it's FREE)
Edited by goldylocks, Today, 12:55 PM.