Challenge #17 - Barth Grooks Euro Tour!

[Kel]

Hi all, Kel here!

 

I've been approached by none other than Barth Grooks and he is a keen supporter of Songstuff and has invited us to pen the lyrics for a song he'd like to use on his upcoming European tour.

 

I ran the idea past John and he's given his thumbs act for me to act as the Developer/Publisher for this challenge. Don't tell anyone, but I think he's a little miffed Barth Grooks didn't contact him!

 

As you know Barth usually writes songs about rodeos, road houses, wild horses or women he's left behind, but he doesn't know much about Europe. Anyhow, Barth was saying when he heard what a fabulous job everyone did for the Strolling Bones he contacted me... I don't know why he chose me, but I'll go with it...

What he would like is a typical Barth Grooks song, but a different European country needs to focus in all three (3) verses. You may choose any three countries and for the record this includes United Kingdom as one country, and all the Scandinavian countries including Iceland. For the sake of the exercise regard Turkey, Russia and Bulgaria the easternmost countries of Europe, whether they are or not.

He doesn't mind what form is used, either ABABAB or AABA or AABABCB. He's happy with them all. He's happy to write the tune but will listen to any ideas.

The only other restriction is he doesn't want any capital cities mentioned, eg London, Paris, Berlin, Rome... you get the idea I'm sure.

Well Challengers, are you up to crafting a tour hit for Barth Grooks?

Get your guitars out and get writing!

 

Cheers,

Kel

 

PS I will not be participatint, with my inside knowledge it would be cheating. However anyone wishing to clarify anything can ask away.

[Kel]

yeah maybe John can move it over, only he has access to the proper place, I think.

 

it is the real #17.

 

Kel

[Rudi]

Hey,

 

Can I set the next challenge?

 

Then I wont have to do it either.

[Rudi]

 

He doesn't mind what form is used, either ABABAB or AABA or AABABCB. He's happy with them all.

 

I am assuming the above are examples and that we are not constrained to use one of those three.

[Kel]

As long as the lyrics comprise 3 verses (one country per verse) Barth is happy.

 

Kel

[Rudi]

Well I have used the opportunity as a rhyming challenge. AABA was the more difficult option.

The only country I had to give up on was the Czech Republic.

As you can see; its been a struggle.

 

 

Roll Me Away

V1

Them limies said ‘hey Barth wontcha  Sing some?’

So we headed on down to the Yu-nited kingdom

The Road crew sure had their work cut out

Because the power plugs there all got three pins on

 

Pre-chorus

This European tour's lost all of its allure. So…

chorus

tour bus roll me away
tour bus roll me away
I don’t know where I am and I no longer give a damn
So let that tour bus roll me away
 

V2

I guess six in the morning was a dumb time to phone ya

But it’s only just turned noon here in Macedonia

I can’t tell how far away I am from you

Because they don’t got miles here down in Makedonska

 

Pre-chorus

Chorus

 

V3

I just learned how the say howdy in Belarusian

It damn near started a second revolution

We had left Belarus just the day before

And the MC apologised for all of the confusion

 

Pre-chorus

Chorus

[goldylocks]

My effort, this one was a hard one, I think.
 
 
European Girls 
 
Verse
 
Cherie, l can't breath when I think of you in a red silk dress
How your blue eyes glowed when you began to dance
Late nights led to passion and sizzling romance 
Cuddling with a lovely brunette, I left back in France 
 
Verse:
 
When I skied down a mountain slope in Switzerland
Anna, your pretty face caught me by surprise
My heart shattered like glass when I said goodbye
I held you close, kissed you softly when you cried 
 
Pre chorus:
 
Oh oh, I'll never forget Europe  
When I left, I thought I'd die
 

Chorus

 

 

Sometimes when I feel lonely 

European girls

Flash

Flash

Before my eyes
Parading like ghost shadows 
Sweeping me back through time 


 Verse:
 
Darling Mackenzie, how can I ever forget you?
Your auburn hair on fire in Scotland's sunlight
Drinking gold Drambuie and making love all night  
Sleeping on green satin sheets holding you tight  
 

Pre chorus:
 
Oh, oh, I'll never forget Europe

When I left, I thought I'd die
 

Chorus

 

Sometimes when I feel lonely 

European girls

Flash

Flash

Before my eyes
Parading like ghost shadows 
Sweeping me back through time 

 
 

Mackenzie                                     Cherie                             Anna
.

 

 

Goldylocks

Edited January 7, 2015 by goldylocks

[goldylocks]

Well I have used the opportunity as a rhyming challenge. AABA was the more difficult option.

The only country I had to give up on was the Czech Republic.

As you can see; its been a struggle.

 

 

Roll Me Away

V1

Them limies said ‘hey Barth wontcha  Sing some?’

So we headed on down to the Yu-nited kingdom

The Road crew sure had their work cut out

Because the power plugs there all got three pins on

 

Pre-chorus

This European tour's lost all of its allure. So…

chorus

tour bus roll me away

tour bus roll me away

I don’t know where I am and I no longer give a damn

So let that tour bus roll me away

 

V2

I guess six in the morning was a dumb time to phone ya

But it’s only just turned noon here in Macedonia

I can’t tell how far away I am from you

Because they don’t got miles here down in Makedonska

 

Pre-chorus

Chorus

 

V3

I just learned how the say howdy in Belarusian

It damn near started a second revolution

We had left Belarus just the day before

And the MC apologised for all of the confusion

 

Pre-chorus

Chorus

Rudi, I thought I would critique your song to the best of my ability. I know your a musician, so I may not know the meter rhythm as well as you, or the technical aspects that are for more experienced writers, but I'd' give it a shot any way. 

 

The Title: Roll Me Away is not original, unfortunately, Bob Seger has a song Roll Me Away.  But I think the title suits the song well.

 

Verses Rhyme: I think your verses rhyme well and definitely have a touch of humor which makes them creative and interesting, as well as enjoyable to read. I also like how you spelled this word Yu-nited kingdom, in your first verse, it gave the verse limie character. Your second verse again you personalized it saying they don't got miles in Macedonia. Keeping the song in the rules for the challenge, you successfully mentioned three of the required European countries, but you added your own touch of uniqueness with your wording.

 

Pre Chorus: Is well written, it leads right into your chorus.

 

Chorus: This is the best part of your song, without a doubt. It's simple, but it's the why of the song. the tour's lost it's appeal, so you want the tour bus to roll you away .Frankly I like the simplicity of the chorus, it delivers your message well. 

 

Over all Rudi, this was a difficult challenge, and I think you carried it off well! I would love to hear this humorous song put to music! I couldn't find anything I  think needed improvement, but that's just my opinion, on how I read your lyrics.

 

Great Job Rudi!  Goldy        

Edited October 30, 2013 by goldylocks

[goldylocks]

Goldy very colourful, what happened to the can-can girls or was I dreaming lol!

Love the movie at the bottom nice touch!

Les

Thanks Les, I put the Cancan dress back in, just for you! lol. Now I'm going to read yours and comment.

 

 

Goldy  

[goldylocks]

 Kel, I just read your description again, I wrote the European tour, as memory, not up coming. Can I break the rule, like everyone else does? Lol


Goldy  

[goldylocks]

Heres 1st draft of my effort, I think I may have overdone it?

 

I have 1 verse to many? so I have added a bridge which would take the place of the last verse if needed and go between a 2nd chorus at the end. in Blue lol!

 

Les

 

 

Knocking On Europe's Door

 

I've traveled all across this land

Been to just about every state there is

Riding bucking bronco’s all my life

I’ve got the urge to travel further          

Than I've ever been before

We’ll soon be knocking on good ole England’s door

 

So pack up your bags and lets get movin

This show is going out of town

Say goodbye to your sweetheart

Tell her you’re be seeing her around

One last night is all you have

So you better do it right

Cos we are all outta here

On the 7.15 - AM flight

 

Now we’ve finished touring England

And it's our time to say goodbye

The Bronco’s really did their job

One last stop! before we leave

See the cliffs from the shore

We’ll soon be knocking on good ole Spain’s door

 

So pack up your bags and lets get movin

This show is going out of town

Say goodbye to your sweetheart

Tell her you’re be seeing her around

One last night is all you have

So you better do it right

Cos we are all outta here

On the 7.15 - AM flight

 

Well Spain was a beautiful country

Plenty of wine, women and song

Cowboys n Bronco’s made me proud

It's time again for us to leave

So adios to you Se-nor

Well soon be knocking on good ole Iceland’s door

 

So pack up your bags and lets get movin

This show is going out of town

Say goodbye to your sweetheart

Tell her you’re be seeing her around

One last night is all you have

So you better do it right

Cos we are all outta here

On the 7.15 - AM flight

 

Farewell England

Adios Spain

Blehss Iceland

We're heading home

We are done

Knocking on Euope's door's

 

Left the hot weather far behind us

Now we’re heading for the snow

Not sure the ponies will like the ice

The last country on our list

Of our European tour

We’ll soon be closing good ole Iceland’s door.

 

So pack up your bags and lets get movin

This show is going out of town

Say goodbye to your sweetheart

Tell her you’re be seeing her around

One last night is all you have

So you better do it right

Cos we are all outta here

On the 7.15 - AM flight

Les, I can't figure out your rhyme scheme, it seems the only lines that rhyme are the last two lines in each verse. Is that your intention? A refrain, is what I'm getting at. Other than that the song sings on it's own, and I like that goodbyes to all the countries with their particular language, nice touch. Cute song!

 

 

Goldy  

Edited October 30, 2013 by goldylocks

[Kel]

 Kel, I just read your description again, I wrote the European tour, as memory, not up coming. Can I break the rule, like everyone else does? Lol

Goldy  

Since you ask so nicely...

 

Kel

[Lisa Gates]

This is my work in progress. Not sure I like the short verses with a long chorus but I have a tune in my head...

This is a story based on my friends Motorcycle Annual Trip from the UK  (Salisbury is called "The City in the Country") to the Mediterranean Sea (aslo called the Great Sea) I enjoy his journey every year on Facebook! LOL

 

The City in the Country or Where the Sun Sets- Lisa M. Guzda 10/2013

 

The city in the country

Is where I’m coming from

Salisbury, Wilshire UK

I always call my home

The wheels they are aturnning

Today I’ll take a ride

I’m heading for the mountains

Right through the countryside

 

They say the sun sets over Europe

I believe this to be true

I’ve seen the sun set over the UK

Far away from you

When the sun sets over Europe

It’s for sure I can’t stay

I know the sun sets over Europe

I’ve seen the sun set in the Uk

 

Time for a mini break

Takin a pleasure cruise

Start from the Bay of Biscay

ride to the Cap de Crues

 

They say the sun sets over Europe

I believe this to be true

I’ve seen the sun set over Spain

Far away from you

When the sun sets over Europe

I’ll be far from feeling pain

I know the sun sets over Europe

I’ve seen the sun set in Spain

 

I ferry to Santander

Scoot through the Pyrenees

Feel the air upon my face

Ending up at the Great Sea

 

They say the sun sets over Europe

I believe this to be true

I’ve seen the sun set over France

Far away from you

When the sun sets over Europe

I’ll be sure to take my chance

I know the sun sets over Europe

I’ve seen the sun set in France

 

Bridge will be about the motorcycle he rides...and bring in a description of the "you" in the chorus too. must get working on this.

Edited November 1, 2013 by lguzda

[Lisa Gates]

 Kel, I just read your description again, I wrote the European tour, as memory, not up coming. Can I break the rule, like everyone else does? Lol

Goldy  

Goldy, Kel just says that the song will be used in an upcoming tour. I think your song is imaginative and full of great descriptions. I felt like any man would ealsily be able to pull off your song. Most excellent!

Lisa

[goldylocks]

This is my woThis is my work in progress. Not sure I like the short verses with a long chorus but I have a tune in my head...

This is a story based on my friends Motorcycle Annual Trip from the UK  (Salisbury is called "The City in the Country") to the Mediterranean Sea (aslo called the Great Sea) I enjoy his journey every year on Facebook! LOL

 

The City in the Country or Where the Sun Sets- Lisa M. Guzda 10/2013

 

The city in the country

Is where I’m coming from

Salisbury, Wilshire UK

I always call my home

The wheels they are aturnning

Today I’ll take a ride

I’m heading for the mountains

Right through the countryside

 

They say the sun sets over Europe

I believe this to be true

I’ve seen the sun set over the UK

Far away from you

When the sun sets over Europe

It’s for sure I can’t stay

I know the sun sets over Europe

I’ve seen the sun set in the Uk

 

Time for a mini break

Takin a pleasure cruise

Start from the Bay of Biscay

ride to the Cap de Crues

 

They say the sun sets over Europe

I believe this to be true

I’ve seen the sun set over Spain

Far away from you

When the sun sets over Europe

I’ll be far from feeling pain

I know the sun sets over Europe

I’ve seen the sun set in Spain

 

I ferry to Santander

Scoot through the Pyrenees

Feel the air upon my face

Ending up at the Great Sea

 

They say the sun sets over Europe

I believe this to be true

I’ve seen the sun set over France

Far away from you

When the sun sets over Europe

I’ll be sure to take my chance

I know the sun sets over Europe

I’ve seen the sun set in France

 

Bridge will be about the motorcycle he rides...and bring in a description of the "you" in the chorus too. must get working on this.

So far, Lisa, the song is very interesting, I felt like you took me on a journey, and I learned about the different places in Europe. Looking forward to more, I like your chorus, I think it's musical on it's own.

 

Goldy

 

I love these tags, what do you think Lisa? Art work always enhances anything!

 

Edited November 1, 2013 by goldylocks

[goldylocks]

Goldy, Kel just says that the song will be used in an upcoming tour. I think your song is imaginative and full of great descriptions. I felt like any man would ealsily be able to pull off your song. Most excellent!

Lisa

Lisa, you are always encouraging with your comments, and your advice, I appreciate it and I'm glad you liked the song

 

.Goldylocks

Edited November 1, 2013 by goldylocks

[Lisa Gates]

So far, Lisa, the song is very interesting, I felt like you took me on a journey, and I learned about the different places in Europe. Looking forward to more, I like your chorus, I think it's musical on it's own.

 

Goldy

 

I love these tags, what do you think Lisa? Art work always enhances anything!

 

AWESOME Tag! I'm laughing so hard! Yes, artwork enhances everything. The weekend is here and I can work on LYRICS! Amen!