Precarious

[Dhananjay M Venkatesh]

This is a set of lyrics i made to a beat i found on youtube, its a sad (kind of sad) beat.

 

man life's twisted getting shot down by bitches

dunno what to do, panic stricken

my whole life i'm being lied to, now its being written

im writing it down formally and no it isn't fiction

all scribbles and scratches, trying to make it simple

half time i write down  wrong intel via my kindle

my mind got frizzled and now its all sizzled

can't pause on the beat, i can feel a light drizzle

i hate myself, maybe that's why i'm scared shitless

every night i get nightmares, or i get beat up by parents

and yeah i'm a coward, i do get scared

but its okay go ahead insult me, i am prepared

i threw up my life and propelled it straight to hell

insulting kids in school, gonna get expelled

time to get out my shotgun, put the bullets on my belt

cos god stopped believing in me, but i believe in myself

 *hook*

believing is the key to immortality

float like a butterfly  and sting like a bee

injure my opponents and confront the jury

my imagination dead and lyrics in misery

can't count how many times i had tried to die

or trying to visit you in school to say goodbye

but now you left me and im spitting words on the fly

got out of the frying pan but trapped in the firefly

 

its just i, me, myself, with all of you bitching

and i sit back and absorb it, trigger finger itching

life of a teenager, sweet, hearing you snitching

life flashing before me this is the fork that im hitting

why cant all of you for once just shut up and listen

my rhythm and my lyrics are on a crash course to oblivion

can't find a better way to suit this volition

this isn't me that's talking its the rage that i've driven

hard to maintain this position that i'm given

can't abort this mission, it's vital to the system

i've got my enemy in sights, time to shoot with precision

headshot, boom, his head just partitioned

send the body home with an apology letter

excuse me miss better treat your kids better

knit this kid a f-ing funeral sweater

bitch when im on the loose, better find some f-ing shelter

*hook*

believing is the key to immortality

float like a butterfly  and sting like a bee

injure my opponents and confront the jury

my imagination dead and lyrics in misery

can't count how many times i had tried to die

or trying to visit you in school to say goodbye

but now you left me and im spitting words on the fly

got out of the frying pan but trapped in the firefly

 

first things first, you've cursed me since birth

burn bitch burn as im storming down the stern

you cant stop this mayhem i was always meant to hurt

ever since you ditched me when i was in frankfurt

took the next plane up when i was sitting with your cup

wondering what time you were gonna show up

now i realized that you never gave a f*ck

i have a grudge to settle, i don't mind getting blood

so tell me your honor, how the f*ck are ya gonna judge

side with the kid who's 15 and kicked to clutch or with the parents? 

but the judge won't budge

it's settled, the world just shut me up but

that's just the very reason why i can't give up

when people insult me, i gotta stand up

gotta man up and gotta follow my gut

this time i'm telling the world to the f*ck shut up!

 

 

i still don't like my hook, i'm trying to find an alternative but i can't so i kind of need help in that i guess  

 

[justsoulin]

Hey, for a rap lyric, and rap music isn't my biggie, I like this, I can read this, get into it.

 

A couple of places, I think in the last verse, you drifted off a little, but on the whole, good stuff. I like that you didn't use profanity just for the sake of it, that you used it to show how angry and frustrated you feel at the moment of using it.

 

What do you think is wrong with the hook? And would this be sung or still spoken?

 

I'm going to leave the other rappers here to put in hook ideas first

 

[Dhananjay M Venkatesh]

yeah i too felt like things took a turn on the third verse, but i let the third one just take over me...it went too much onto the personal side but, i had to XD. and, the hook is supposed to be sung but the thing is, i have a feeling i can do much better on the hook. i've made 2 collabs with a friend, he doesn't know about this website, i'll show it to him. i just need help on knowing how to use FL Studio (guys version 11.0.2 crossover for mac is what i have) and maybe a little help on garageband. i have a pretty decent keyboard upstairs which could help me but my parents would maul me if i bring it to the computer. i think the hook doesn't fall "in place" with the music. the problem is since my music is a secret and my parents don't know about it, i can't get the equipment i need for all this, so i can only roll with free softwares or demos.

[justsoulin]

Add the link (not the share video link) of the youtube beat - help us know how you got what from where

 

Help on software, that's another topic in another forum here - http://forums.songstuff.com/forum/93-software/ Be aware, folks do not take kindly to warez etc.

 

You may do better learning Audacity as 1 - it's free & 2 - it accepts a lot of plugins etc and so is used by a lot of folks.

[Dhananjay M Venkatesh]

thats the link and ive had my share of audacity. :/ i dont find it convenient for creating beats. for vocals i would i guess go for audacity but FL Studio has much more potential

[justsoulin]

Well I guess there's a lot more help for using FLS on youtube ref beats. I took a quick look and the tuts for Audacity did not seem hip-hop minded