Death Hour Revived

[nihalkolar]

Link to the beat : https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=d2d9YFBH2yE

VERSE 1

Can't ya'll see all this crappedy crap stabbing me

Just can't stop, relieve these atrophies jabbing me

just can't drop, retrieve key's energy lagging here

guess it cant stop them tragedies from strapping me

to asylum seats, a silent kid being solitary, backing him

was bullshit at school, fights dragging him

into trouble, at some, having him in abandoned streets

unplanned of shit, subliminally to find his abandoned dreams

and his empty black road back home

The kid was left alone, left to burn, under the cold sun 

he walked alone, reborn and stunned the whole ton

of people, from the top till their toes, they were time struck

but still, he was brain washed, wasn't functioning grime put

In him like potter, manipulated by Voldemort, slime got

over his past, present, future with bullshit shooting crime shots

He can't recover cause he's being mind-f*cked

 

VERSE 2

Had my knife on my left, drugs on my right

Had my fights in my life, them slugs on my side

Painkillers to do the job were outta my sight

Steadier I took the knife, emptier, shook my eyes 

Stabbed my self, felt heavier, I took my blinds off

Knife in my brain, cut through the chest till I fell down

Fell on the floor screaming till i gassed out

Felt the gain with the pain to be slashed out

Be gone forever, my rap career's bashed out

I'm dreaming, I'm screaming and ain't breathing

lemme pull out my heart for break leaving

Here's my heart for all who wanted to tear me apart

Here's my reward for killing me, to fear me not

im gone for long, ya'll maggots can be back to your jobs

stacked to your lobs, fact is i'm gone, that is I'm dark

And mark soon, you'll be dark too, doomed

 

VERSE 3

Woke up in the hospital, friends clubbed with sounds of tears

looked at my heart's rate, them ups and downs of fears 

same way, our dice being thrown, flipping with the cups of frowns

downed with kills, was scarred no more with pops and bloahs!

the drops and fouls, looked at all the clocks they stopped

I died and took time but with me alive, survived and locks unlocked

time was racing back on, i guess i do matter all along blocks unblocked

Time restored, looks like i did shatter and fall along falls all dropped

thought my homes scattered and stalled but i was wrong even after

i stopped living every moment, thought my hopes were lost even-ed after

I hopped stealing their hearts, they did miss me but i did more, weeping laughter

that's the kinda' shit i did when i woke up, i cracked a joke and seeking answer

from me, everyone jumped in tears, hugged with and pumped with cheers

well, all our saga's close with 'lived happily ever after'

[iwishtorightasong]

im new... this is bloody, filled with drugs and death and sorrow!!!.. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .in other words i like it!

[nihalkolar]

ohhh, yeahh :\
Thanks yo

[jackietrainwreck]

yo that shit was pretty dope. I loved the flow on this joint. Shit was pretty deep too bro. Keep it up

[nihalkolar]

Hahah, thanks man!

[bronzerebel]

This shits dope man. My only critique would be to try to keep your rhyme scheme more consistent in the first verse. Maybe even try to use more metaphors and shit. But that could just be your writing style so I might just be talking out my ass haha. Keep it up homie

[nihalkolar]

Hey man, thanks