emotions

[Hope4Peace]

Edit: Ok, as you can see, this is from more than a year ago lol (close to when I started writing) , but it goes with the current theme.....

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if u start to feel like this is kinda chaotic and jumbled, GOOD!!!!! i hope u do!!!!!

Emotions runnin' through my head

Emotions make me wish I'm dead

All these emotions seem so real

They leave me unsure how to feel

Should I be happy, sad, or greatful?

My confusion makes me feel so pitiful

Unwanted, pathetic, and so distraught

Is this the fate that i have caught?

Emotions

Commotion

Emotions

Devotion

Emotions devoted to creating commotion

The disarray makes my mind decay;

Emotions makin' me feel this way

Emotions will take my life one day

Overwhelmed, overloaded

My minds so bloated;

Its about to explode

So i gotta unload

I'm livin' in vain

So I'll abolish my pain;

Ive nothin' to gain

So my blood I will drain

Emotions

Commotion

Emotions

Devotion

Emotions got the best of me

They completely flooded my head;

Emotions got the best of me

And now I'm laying here dead.

[x_*kate*_x]

i love it! i think its amazing! i feel like i can relate to it....and i feel like that all the time! i like it when i can relate to different pieces of writing...awesome job!

[Hope4Peace]

hmmm thnx i was beginin ta think no one would comment, it wouldnt be tha first time, thnx bunches though:)

*~peace and love~*

[Hope4Peace]

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[Nightwolf]

I think most of this one is great, not a big fan of the last verse, up until then you leave it to interpretation, the last verse kind of leaves it flat and detracts from the Poem as a whole. Try to make it a little more vague

IMHO

John

[merciful evans]

i agree wiv nightwolf.

the last stanza: it reminds me of the end of that song "save all your kisses for me"

other than that it's well voiced emotion.