Wind Up Girl

[LadySeda]

Hello all.

Figured I would hop right in and get going. This is something I wrote about a month ago. Wanted to share something. If you see anything that could be improved, or have suggestions for tightening up the flow please let me know. I do love this, but know that all can be improved with editing and care. I hope you enjoy it and thanks for reading. Rebecca

 

Wind up girl…

Little chameleon, little liar

Warranting attention

When someone desires

Withers under the winter snow

Blinded with doubt and misery

Seeking love in abstract fashion

She adorns a cloak for each occasion

Mask is worn in grand display

So when she comes naked

No one knows her

 

She is liar, chameleon

Actress acclaimed

Bitch for blame

Whore of shame

Goddess to some

And demon

 

Glittering high on her appointed esteem

She fits all sizes and sews her dreams

Who she is she cannot say

She’s been so many

Worn different names

Writer, daughter, lover, wife

Witch, believer, caregiver of strife

Whore, slut, psychotic adept

Selfish little girl who takes and rants

 

The hand of good

The wrath of god

The karma queen

Of all gone wrong

 

Wind up girl

Little liar, chameleon

Goddess to some

And demon

 

 

 

[scotsman89]

don't really know if it can be improved pretty good . feisty , hot and spice , just joking

 

john

[LadySeda]

don't really know if it can be improved pretty good . feisty , hot and spice , just joking

 

john

Ha... when the shoe fits I'll wear it. lol 

Thank you so much for reading and responding John. 

It's great to be here

[Music60s70s]

Her name's Legion,

by different names.

 

--Pat

[LadySeda]

Her name's Legion,

by different names.

 

--Pat

So to speak yes, I believe that is true. Though she reacts more then anything. Through trying to fit in, to please everyone, and to be what everyone else expects of her... she has no true identity of her own. And that in itself to me is tragic.

 

Thank you Pat It is great to meet you (cyber/web speaking that is)  

[BJS]

love your words in this write,

 

Who she is she cannot say

She’s been so many

Worn different names

 

I really like the lines above, Catches the reader and allows to identify with people in your own circle.  

[MPerry]

Hi Rebecca

 

Really nice write-full blown-giving us strong visuals and lots to discuss and talk about- so thanks for sharing- looking forward to hearing more from you!...keep writing and I will be reading!!..regards Mike

[THEHOUND]

WOW...right on...where can I meet her...great poem..inspiration..cant waite to read more from you