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They say I should not be successful, that it would be stressful. But they don't know I could do anything, I am God's vessel. I'll wrestle with the devil, but I'll nestle in God's love. As for evil I am a rebel, and my enemy? He's just a pebble, God's love is broad in it I will revel. It's there even when I am flawed, if everyone knew that there would be no holy facades. Jesus in the heart was meek and lowly. But he confessed his love boldly on that cross, it was a matrimonial ceremony, people say they're their own God, but when they go home they pray to the Lord for those job's. 

 

its not not finished but this is what I have so far; constructive criticism is welcomed, God bless. 

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Hi Alexandria,

I love what you have started here.

I moved this over to the correct forum section so you can maybe get some better critiques. Please join our community and critique others (which in turn helps you learn too!)

I have to say your rhyming words are very fresh. One nit for me is the line about Jesus being lowly. I know that He was treated lowly but that's not what you seem to be saying. I would look at that and make it more clear and less derogatory towards Jesus. My opinion...

All the best,

Lisa

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