I need to grow

[TheRunaway]

Haven't posted on this forum in a minute, these are just some bars that I recently wrote. Would really appreciate some critique. 

 

Enough of the small talk, homie I need to grow/

Young Pablo stunted by the shows/ of fake personality/

Fake f*cks with fake motives surrounding me/

I just want notoriety without everybody hounding me/ for solutions that I don't have and can't afford/

40 a week for 13, my time is simply worth more/

I'm just trying to soar/ to have whiskey to pour/ and life with rapport/ 

So my girl can lay close and concur/ that my problems aren't more important than her/

So my father can finally say you're welcome/ because my life had a good outcome/ without retribution because I don't want none/

I don't want constant stress and pain in my liver/ with nothing to live for and branches splintered/

Surrounded by fallen leaves that I cover up in the winter/

To not even consider/ that maybe I'm just a sinner/ young in age that's got a life ahead of high f*cks and low blows/

Mary Janes and Jon Doe's/ 

But until god decides to show I'm outta time for my shadow/ 

So enough of the small talk, homie I need to grow/

 

 

Edited May 6, 2016 by TheRunaway