Please Send Help

[SilentPoet]

What is the end

What messages do we send

What direction does the path bend

All I have is paper and a pen

 

What is beginning

What is it that we call winning

Why do I always feel as if I'm sinning

What on earth is happening to me

 

Now can’t you see

This is not what I was meant to be

Why on earth does this have to be me

Now can’t you see

 

Because I’m blue

And I’m completely obsessed with you

But what on earth am I to do

Because I honestly haven’t got a clue

Who are you?

 

Where is the light?

Why do I wanna be with you all the time?

Why do I have to find someplace to hide?

I don’t wanna die

 

Because I can’t help but feel alone

Because I can’t help but feel like there's no place to go

Am I all alone?

 

Because I can’t help from going crazy

Please send help.

I can’t help from hoping someone will save me

That’s why I’m asking you

Please send help

Please hear my yelps

Please send help

Please let me tell

Someone

I don’t think I’ll ever have fun

again.

[Michan]

I'm sorry, I like to read poetry but I'm not English speaker and I don't get a clear idea about what this composition is about, and I really want to get the meaning correctly.

 

I understand the speaker is in love with somebody that is not clearly corresponding him/her, and he/she is just willing the beloved one does something to help the speaker to understand exactly in which personal situation, and what perspectives do they have together? And that the speaker feels everything he/she does towards the beloved one is wrong?

 

If that is so, I don't get the question about finding a place to hide, because that will mean the beloved one is avouding him or something? Also I don't see why you put on the sentence about not willing to die. What's the relation between that and finding or not finding a place to hide? You would die if you hide, because that means letting the beloved one to fly away? Also, I don't know English composition resources for poetry, so I don't know what "I can't help from ..ing..." means exactly.

 

In terms of form I like the rythm and the tension. Sounds very tragic, very painful, strong and desperate. Maybe I would take out one of the two "What/Why on Earth...". I agree those are very nice and strong words, but it's noticeable you used the same resource twice. 

 

Anyways, I enjoy it! Thanks for sharing! Looking forward your confirmarion of the meaning!

 

Best,

[Mac Wilkey]

@Michan--the poet captures his predicament exactly.  He can hardly think straight because he's in love.  Think about it that way.

 

@SilentPoetI like it because it does capture what I think you're trying to portray.  I don't like it becae I hate tous be in that predicament and I don't want to think about it again.  It ws bad enough the first time .

[RC James]

You capture the feeling of paranoia and personal worthlessness - I hope this is a study of someone else - if not, talk to someone about these troubles.

[Greg M]

On 2/5/2019 at 8:48 PM, SilentPoet said:

What is the end

What messages do we send

What direction does the path bend

All I have is paper and a pen

 

What is beginning

What is it that we call winning

Why do I always feel as if I'm sinning

What on earth is happening to me

 

Now can’t you see

This is not what I was meant to be

Why on earth does this have to be me

Now can’t you see

 

Because I’m blue

And I’m completely obsessed with you

But what on earth am I to do

Because I honestly haven’t got a clue

Who are you?

 

Where is the light?

Why do I wanna be with you all the time?

Why do I have to find someplace to hide?

I don’t wanna die

 

Because I can’t help but feel alone

Because I can’t help but feel like there's no place to go

Am I all alone?

 

Because I can’t help from going crazy

Please send help.

I can’t help from hoping someone will save me

That’s why I’m asking you

Please send help

Please hear my yelps

Please send help

Please let me tell

Someone

I don’t think I’ll ever have fun

again.

 

The fact that every reviewer seems to have a different take on this indicates a lack of clarity, unless that is what you are trying to portray. I get the feeling that this is about mental illness, obsessive-compulsive disorder, bi-polar illness, or somebody building up to a nervous breakdown. Looking at it again, with the bold type and obsession with rhyming, it sounds more and more like a rant, or something that "Punk poets" used to do in the late 70s and early 80s. 

[Jac]

We live in the most tec age, yet loneliness is more widespread than ever in all of mans history.

l blame all tec..bring back pen and paper.

Well written poem, speaks volumes.