goldylocks

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    I just started entering contests on the Country and Western Music Forum. I write simple lyrics, nothing sophisticated or complicated. I find simplicity as what everyone can understand.

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  1. Been very ill this last few weeks but,I wanted to wish you all a Happy Thanksgiving! Sandy
  2. Could that be me? What a nice gesture, and an adorable song! Also a nice tribute to Songstuff! Sandy
  3. James, you never cease to amaze me with your diversity and talent. Very creative write and fun song! Sandy
  4. Thanks Jan for commenting, I think you have a pretty good lyric also! Nice testimonial for Songstuff ! Maybe a tweak here and there. But what i like about your writing is you always write lyrics concise and not too wordy. Goldy
  5. Jan what is your title of the song? Also, I think your chorus is not strong enough bringing your verses together. That's just my opinion of course...Maybe bring part of your bridge and chorus together like this suggestion or something like this.. Title suggestion Songstuff Friends. Just trying to help, keep or sweep. Chorus . Great minds think alike, not trying to pretend Honestly, honesty is what we get from them Some of our critics are now our Songstuff friends Goldy
  6. Challenge # 44 Songstuff You're the World to Me Verse: Give me an S, O, N, G, S, T, U, F, F Now what have you got everybody A place to write and express yourself And let your imagination run free Verse: From every country all over the world Songwriters, Lyricists write their songs Country, Rock, Blues, and Rap, Hip Hop Hoping a record contract will come along Chorus Songstuff You're the world to me I appreciate the people who critique Giving their advice with just a tweak A few simple words scribbled down Can have meaning and be profound Verse: Let's not forget the Songstuff starter Who oversees the writing forum every day Give the man from Scotland three cheers Shout out a loud, Hip, Hip, Hip, Hooray! Verse: Who would dare to close Songstuff down Will have a cyberspace war on their hands Voices would rise up in anger everywhere Every song writer would take a stand Chorus Songstuff You're the world to me I appreciate the people who critique Giving their advice with just a tweak A few simple words scribbled down Can have meaning and be profound ,Verse: So people keep on writing your songs Let the words and musical melodies flow Never give up on your writing dreams One day you might have your own show
  7. Les, Hi Les, I agree with James the last verse needs work it doesn't seem to fit in with a wife whose frustrated and angry, but It is very conversational and I can envision the two talking to each other the way you wrote it. Over all I think it's very well written. A few tweaks and you could record it. Goldy
  8. Jan, I gave this explanation, which tells why they split. She was jealous of a girl that was a friend and she was insecure in herself with his love. She thought he was being unfaithful. female I know you told me that girl was just a friend I won't be jealous and fight with you like before I'll trust you and never shut our bedroom door We'll be lovers until the end of time I won't remember yesterday, it's the past I know your love is faithful and it'll last Goldy
  9. ​Jan, I really like how you have this lyric tight and concise with wording. You say what you need to say with emotion. As I was reading it, I could actually see two people in love standing face to face trying to salvage their relationship. I thought you did an excellent job! It might need a tweak here and there, but that is totally up to you. I liked it the way it is. Goldy
  10. James, my husband Mike and I listened to this and couldn't stop laughing! How creative and what a fun song I loved it. Missed all of you! Well written! It takes two goldy
  11. This is the trimmed down Version # 2 Challenge #43 I took a lot out, I think it sounds better, thanks for commenting Les, it's nice to be back! It's Going to Be a Long, Long Night .Verse Male I was hitching a ride out of town Feeling a little lonely and sorry for myself When you showed up in a pickup truck Opened up the door and told me to get in My heart fell to the floor when you smiled at me You grabbed my hand, then suddenly I could see Chorus Male by himself It's going to be a long, long night It's going to be a long, long night Cause baby I'll be kissing, hugging and holding you tight The way I used to do It's going to be a long, long night It's going to be a long, long night Cause baby when you're in my arms, I'll be making it right When I make love to you Verse Male The other day you flew into a rage Threw our love away, and wouldn't calm down Told me to leave, you didn't want me around Now you say you want me back home again There is nothing in this world I want more Then you wearing your wedding ring like before Verse: female I know you told me that girl was just a friend I won't be jealous and fight with you like before I'll trust you and never close our bedroom door We'll be lovers until the end of time I won't remember yesterday, it's the past I know your love is faithful and it'll last Verse: Female We can build that home in the country You and I dreamed about under a blue, sky We'll live our lives just like the Fourth of July Now, that I know that you feel the same way When you said you'd came back home yesterday And that you missed me and wanted to stay Chorus Male and Female singing together It's going to be a long, long night It's going to be a long, long night Cause baby I'll be kissing, hugging and holding you tight The way I used to do It's going to be a long, long night It's going to be a long, long night Cause baby when you're in my arms, I'll be making it right When I make love to you Outra Chorus It's going be a long, long night It's going be a long, long night Cause baby when you're in my arms, I'll be making it right When I make love to you Repeat last two lines fading out
  12. Challenge #43 It's Going to Be a Long, Long Night It's been awhile, thought I would give it shot. Verse Male I was hitching a ride on the road out of town Feeling a little lonely and sorry for myself When you showed up in our pickup truck Opened up the door and told me to get in My heart fell to the floor when you smiled at me You grabbed my hand, then suddenly I could see Chorus Male by himself It's going to be a long, long night It's going to be a long, long night Cause baby I'll be kissing, hugging and holding you tight The way I used to do It's going to be a long, long night It's going to be a long, long night Cause baby when you're in my arms, I'll be making it right When I make love to you Verse Male The other day you walked out and flew into a rage Threw our marriage away like a rose fading on the ground Told me to pack up and leave, you didn't want me around Now you say you want me to come back home again There is nothing in the world I could hope for more Then you wearing your gold wedding ring like before Verse: female I was wrong not to trust you and believe in your love If we are ever argue and get into a fight like before I'll never hurt you darling and close our bedroom door We'll be best friends and lovers until the end of time I won't remember the day we parted, it's in the past Cause I know your love is faithful and I know it'll last Verse: Female We can build that country home and have horses You and I dreamed about under a blue, sunny sky We'll live our lives lit up, just like the Fourth of July Now, that I know that you feel the same way as I do When you said you'd came back home the other day And said you missed me terribly and wanted to stay Chorus Male and Female singing together It's going to be a long, long night It's going to be a long, long night Cause baby I'll be kissing, hugging and holding you tight The way I used to do It's going to be a long, long night It's going to be a long, long night Cause baby when you're in my arms, I'll be making it right When I make love to you Outra Chorus It's going be a long, long night It's going be a long, long night Cause baby when you're in my arms, I'll be making it right When I make love to you Repeat last two lines fading out
  13. Loneliness isn't your friend

  14. James, very bluesy, nice simple write. Says what it needs with emotions without being over wordy. I have to say I like this one better. The more you write the better you're becoming! I always enjoy your songs. Goldy
  15. Sgtsoul, this is very well written! You can not only envision the misery the betrayed person has experienced but also feel the pain. I really like your bridge, a lot of raw emotion. Especially these lines. The whole song actually vibrates with emotion! The flames consume me waiting here to die alone ….so my pain will go unspoken Take another piece from the heart that never learns Pour some gasoline onto the fire that still burns Nice Write! Goldy